中考英语作文叙事记叙文专题复习指导省公开课一等奖全国示范课微课金奖课件

--记叙文(叙事篇)

中考作文指导1/60叙事记叙文写作主要特点：记叙为主

稍加议论旁带说明或感想2/60记叙文记叙文用于记叙过去发生事件或经历，以写人、叙事为主要内容。它能够包含历史，游记，报道，回想，故事，琐事等。这么文章也要有中心。普通从第一或第三人称角度出发，表示自己或他人经历或感受，使读者对事情十分明了以取得强烈感受。记叙文通常以普通过去时为主，依据上下文用各种时态。3/60

写好记叙文基本要领1.头绪分明，脉络清楚2.突出中心，详略得当3.用活语言，准确生动4/60记叙文写作注意事项一、交代背景文章开头应概括地介绍事件发生时间、地点、人物以及事件等二、详略得当过多无须要细节会冲淡文章主题。所以，在细节选择上应注意选择与主题亲密相关内容，从而点明文章中心。三、条理清楚记叙文普通按照时间次序或空间次序来描述，要求层次清楚、条理清楚。5/60

中考英语写作评分标准

一档文（17-20分）写出全部内容关键点，层次清楚，语言流畅，有句式改变，有复杂结构，最少2-3个，基本无语法错误，只有1-2个，或有少许因为使用复杂结构而引发语法或拼写错误，但不影响意义了解。

6/60Howcanwewriteagoodcomposition(作文)?7/60第一步：都要认真审题，明确写作体裁、要求和提醒关键点Howcanwewriteagoodcomposition?(Haveadiscussion!)详细做法：用笔勾画8/60

假如你是王林。你所在学校“爱心俱乐部(HelpingHandsClub)”将吸收新会员。你想加入该俱乐部，请依据下面表格和图片内容，用英语写一封自荐信。

姓名王林性别男本人特点身体健康；学习刻苦；乐于助人；与同学友好相处“爱心”表现（见图片）加入目标1.…2.…例9/60要求：1.表示清楚，语句通顺，意思连贯；

2.关键点须包含表格和四幅图片中信息，但不得使用真实姓名和校名等；

3.表格中“加入目标”一栏内容由考生自拟；

4.词数：70左右。10/60第二步：列出写作提要（Outline）。详细做法：依据段落整理写作关键点不要遗漏关键点！11/60WriteanOutlineIntroductionMainbodyConclusion{{Iwanttojoin…

本人特点

“爱心”表现加入目标看表格看表格看图自拟Ihopeyouwillagreewithme.

能够用英文或汉字姓名/性别易遗漏关键点！12/60自荐信Whatwillyouwrite？王林Whoareyouinthisletter?人称:

IWhat’syourpurpose?加入该俱乐部时态：普通现在时为主Thinking:13/60DearChairperson,IamaboystudentfromClass1Grade9.

I’dliketojointheHelpingHandsClub.Iamhealthy.Iworkhardatmylessons.Ilikehelpingothers.Igetonwellwithmyclassmates.IfIjointheclub,Iwillbeabletomakemorefriends.AndIcanalso

domoreforothers.

扣分原因一词数不够！14/60DearChairperson,IamaboystudentfromClass1Grade9.I’dliketojointheHelpingHandsClub.Iamhealthy.Iworkhardatmylessons.Ilikehelpingothers.Igetonwellwithmyclassmates.IfIjointheclub,Iwillbeabletomakemorefriends.AndIcanalsodomoreforothers.

Introduction本人特点加入目标扣分原因二遗漏关键点！15/60WriteanOutlineIntroductionMainbodyConclusion{{Iamaboy…

I’dliketojoin…

本人特点“爱心”表现加入目标Ihopeyouwillagreewithme.

无法拿满分！16/60DearChairperson,IamaboystudentfromClass1Grade9.I’dliketobeamemberoftheHelpingHandsClub.Iamhealthy.Iworkhardatmylessons.Ilikehelpingothers.IgetonwellwithmyclassmatesIfIjointheclub,Iwillbeabletomakemorefriends.Besides,Icandomoreforothers.YoursWangLin少了两个主要部分，扣5-6分，只好11-12分！缺乏“爱心”表现也缺乏Conclusion17/60“爱心”表现(examples)Picture1

help…with…helpclassmateswithlessons我I

oftenhelpclassmateswithlessons.

看图18/60Picture2help…cross…“爱心”表现(examples)看图

helpoldpeoplecrosstheroad

Ihelpoldpeoplecrosstheroadonmywayhome.19/60Picture3“爱心”表现(examples)看图givemyseatto…

givemyseattopeopleinneed

Ioftengivemyseattopeopleinneedonabus.20/60“爱心”表现(examples)看图Picture4cleanupthepark

helpcleanupthepark

Ioftenhelpcleanupthepark.21/60“爱心”表现(examples)1.

I

oftenhelpclassmateswithlessons.2.Ihelpoldpeoplecrosstheroadonmywayhome.3.Ioftengivemyseattopeopleinneedonabus.4.Ioftenhelpcleanupthepark.22/60ConclusionI’llbegladifIcanjointheclub.Ihopeyouwillagreewithme.23/60DearChairperson,IamaboystudentfromClass1Grade9.I’dliketobeamemberoftheHelpingHandsClub.Iamhealthy.Iworkhardatmylessons.IlikehelpingothersIgetonwellwithmyclassmates.IfIjointheclub,Iwillbeabletomakemorefriends.Besides,Icandomoreforothers.YoursWangLinI’llbegladifIcanjointheclub.Ihopeyouwillagreewithme.

andoftenhelpclassmateswiththeirlessons.Onmywayhome,Ioftenhelpoldpeoplecrosstheroad.Onabus,Ialwaysgivemyseattopeopleinneed.Sometimes,Ihelptocleanupthepark.不但关键点完整了，词数也够了。24/60写作：第一步就是要认真审题，明确写作体裁、要求和提醒关键点第二步就是要列出写作提要，依据段落整理写作关键点。写作前：确定人称、时态写作后：

？25/60作文中应防止几个常见语言错误：时态错误（扣分多，一个时态错误扣分在1分左右）。中国式英语（不正确英文表示会让整句不得分）。单词拼写错误及大小写（单词拼写一定要过关）。介词,代词，非谓语动词或形容词副词不正确使用（对单词词性要熟悉）。名词单复数（细心就能够防止错）。26/60写作：第一步就是要认真审题，明确写作体裁、要求和提醒关键点第二步就是要列出写作提要，依据段落整理写作关键点。写作前：确定人称、时态写作后：

检验27/60另外作文中书写不规范，卷面不整齐也是要失分（中考中有0.5-1分卷面整齐分，不能丢！）。28/60Writingskills（“写”技巧）方法一:善用词汇甚至善用高级词汇29/60Whichisbetter?

他们在海滩上听音乐。ATheylistenedtothemusiconthebeach.BTheyenjoyedthemusiconthebeach.30/60Whichisbetter?

我希望你能帮助我。AIwishyoucanhelpme.BI’mlookingforwardtoyourhelp.31/60Whichisbetter?

他们很早就到了。ATheyarrivedearly.BTheyarrivedasearlyastheycould.32/60Whichisbetter?

最终，他狗得救了，他感到很诧异。AHisdogwassavedatlast.Hewasverysurprised.BTohissurprise,hisdogwassavedatlast.33/60AIthinklearningEnglishisinteresting.BIfinditreallyfuntolearnEnglish.

我认为学英语很有趣。

我们应该保护环境。AWeshouldprotecttheenvironment.BIt’sourdutytoprotecttheenvironment.34/60方法二:活用各种句型Writingskills（“写”技巧）35/60

她还小，搬不动这么重箱子。ASheisveryyoung.Shecan’tcarrytheheavybox.BSheistooyoungtocarrytheheavybox.CSheissoyoungthatshecan’tcarrythe…DSheisnotoldenoughtocarrythe…36/60方法三:妙用关联词Writingskills（“写”技巧）37/601.表示并列或递进:and,aswellas,both…and,what’smorenotonly…butalso,neither…nor2.表示选择:or,either…or3.表示转折:but,however,although\though,afterall,anyway4.表示因果:because,so,therefore,since,for,asaresult5.表示条件:if,unless6.表示对比:instead,not…but,while,inthesameway,ontheonehand…ontheotherhand7.表示解释:forexample,forinstance,suchas,thatistosay,inotherwords,totellthetruth8.表示次序:tobeginwith,firstly,first(ofall),second(ly),next,later,sincethen,fromthenon,finally,intheend9.表示强调:also,besides,especially,actually,infact10.表示结论:allinall,altogether,inaword,generallyspeaking,inshort关联词(connectionwords)38/60Let’stry_____________Iamtired,Ikeeponworkingtillmidnight.Hedidn’tgotomovies,hewenttotheconcert______.Welikedoingkindsofsports_____swimming,runningandhiking._____,hestoodup.Thenhegotout._____,hewentback.____________,hesmiled.Though\AlthoughinsteadlikeFirstNextFinally\Atlast39/60Howdopeoplespendtheirvacation?Wemadeasurveyandhereisourreport.Accordingtoit,

alotofpeopletravel.

And

somepeoplestayathome.TheywatchTVorsurftheInternet.

Also

some

otherpeoplevisitfriendsorparents.

However,

afewpeoplework.

Comeandenjoyyourvacation.Peoplewhorelaxwellworkwell.连(connect)40/60Accordingtoit,mostpeoplechoosetotraveltogetawayfromthebusyworldduringtheholidays.Thensomepeopleliketostayathome,watchingTVorsurfingtheInternettohaveagoodrest.However,

afewpeoplehavetowork.

Asthesayinggoes,“AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.”Comeandenjoyyourvacation.Peoplewhorelaxwellworkwell.美(beautify)Andtovisitfriendsorparentsalsomakesthemrelaxed.

Proverb（谚语）/saying41/60加谚语(Proverb/saying)可用于”beginning”和”ending”，多用后者。42/60方法四:妙用引文和例子

（多用于“thebody”）Writingskills（“写”技巧）43/60青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球。Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.Forexample,

wecanuserecyclablebagsinsteadofplasticbags,stopusingnapkins,plantmoretreesandsavewaterandenergy.加例子44/60加例子在家里，我经常帮助父母亲干家务活。Ioftenhelpmyparentsdohousework,suchas

washingdishes,foldingtheclothes,takingoutthetrashandsoon.45/60结尾：感悟体会46/60Let’spractice!47/60例：请以“AVisittoaFarm”为题，依据提醒写一次愉快参观．48/60

Todaywevisitedafarm.Earlyinthemorningwemetattheschoolgateandwenttheretogether.Thefarmworkersgaveusawarmwelcome.Thentheheadofthefarmshowedusaround.Howgladweweretoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell！Atnoonwehadapicniclunchinthesunshine.Afterashortrest,wehadgreatfunsinginganddancing,tellingjokesorstories.Twoofusevenplayedagameofchess.Weenjoyedourselves.Thetimepassedquickly.Beforeweknewit,wehadtosaygood-byetotheworkers.范文

AVisittoaFarm49/60例–Atrafficaccident首段：首段概括交代事件发生时间、地点、人物等信息

Aweekago,Iwitnessedatrafficaccidentinarainydayonmywaytoschool,whichstillsticksinmymind.50/60例–Atrafficaccident中心段：交待细节，重视在how;交待细节时应注意事项？过多无须要细节会冲淡文章主题。51/60例–Atrafficaccident中心段赏析Itwasabout7:00onFridaymorning,(Oct.31st).（补充说明时间）IwaswalkingthroughthepedestrianoverpassnearmyschoolwhenIwasshockedbythescreechofacar.（事情起因）Isawamanknockeddownbyablackcar.Soonmanycarswerejammedthere.IgotthereandfoundthatbesideablackBenzlayamiddle-agedmaninapoolofblood.（交代一些细节）Thestreetturnedchaotic.（事情大致经过）Afteramoment,thepoliceandanambulancearrived.Thevictimwasinstantlysenttothehospital.（事情结果）注意空间移动：Igotthere…52/60例–Atrafficaccident结尾段赏析

结尾段：可适当发表一点议论

Inmyopinion,thepedestrianshouldhavetakentheoverpasswhencrossingthestreet.Besides,thedrivermighthavedriventoofast,regardlessofsuchbadweather.Anyway,Ibelieveaccidentsmaybeavoidedifwebecomeawareoftheimportanceofsafety.（结尾）

53/60一档作文鉴赏

Lastyear,aterriblefluspreadacrossthewholeschool.Oneof

myclassmate,John/JaneDoe,becameavictimofit.He/Sheranahighfever,andordinarymedicinedidn’tworkonhim.

Thenewsquicklyreachedeverybodyinourclass.SomeclassmatesrecordedtheEnglishlessonsforhimsothathe/shecouldkeepupwithhis/herstudies.OurEnglishteachercalledonhim/herattheweekendssometimes.Withcareandhelp,he/shewassoonabletobeupandaboutandfinallycamebacktotheclass.

Fromthisevent,Ilearntwothings.Oneisthatwithlove,noillnessordifficultyisterrible.Theotheristhatloveandhelparetwo-waystreets.OurclassmatesofferedJohn/JaneDoekindhelppartlybecausehe/shehimself/herselfhadalwaysbeenahelpfulperson.SoIrealizethatwhenwehelpothers,wearehelpingourselves.54/60

Inthesummersportsmeetinglastyear,oneofmyclassmates,John/JaneDoe,suddenlyfelltothegroundandhurtherleftfootwhenhe/shewaspracticinghighjump.His/Herfaceturnedpaleandshowedgreatpain.

Seeingthis,ourclassmatesimmediatelycametoheraid.Theystruggledtotakehertothetemporaryemergencyroom.Oneboyuntiedhis/hershoeandappliedicerockstohis/herwound.Meanwhile,girlscomfortedherinasoftvoice.SoontheP.E.teachercame.Hecheckedhis/hersoundandtooksomeemergencymeasurestolessenherpain.Fifteenminuteslater,theambulancearrivedandshewassenttohospital.Luckilyenough,withourcareandconcern,John/JaneDoerecoveredquickly.

Suchanincidentimpressedeveryonepresent.Irealizethatloveandcarearethebestmedicineforaninjuredperson

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LastFriday,myclassmateJohnwasabsentbecausehesuddenlycaughtaheavyfluandranahighfever.（时间、人物、事件交代清楚）

Afterschool,wethreevolunteerstudents,togetherwithourclassteacherwenttoseehim.Johnstayedinbedandhadarunningnose.Hetoldusthathewasanxiousabouthisstudies.Onhearingthat,wepromisedhimwewouldtryourbesttohelp.Therefore,inthefollowingdays,wearrangedourselvestoteachhimeverydayinturn,hopingtoensurethathewouldcatchupwithuswhenhecamebacktoschool.（条理清楚，因果关系合乎逻辑，细节描写恰到好处）

Inmyopinion,nooneisborntolivealone.Weshouldlove,careandhelpeachother.Moreover,friendshipcanhelpdefeatdifficultiesmoreeasily.

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Asoldsayinggoes,“Afriendinneedisafriendindeed.”Itwassuchagroupoftruefriendswhomeltedmyheartgentlyanddeeplyatonetime.

Thisautumn,Iunfortunatelycamedownwithinfluenzabecauseofnothavingwellpreparedforthechill.Ikeptfeelingdizzyandhadaheadacheaccompaniedwithfever.Myclassmatesandteacherstriedtoarguemeintotakingagoodrestathome;nonethelessIwasterriblyconcernedaboutmissinglessons.Theyhandedmeaglassofhotwater,whichwarmedmyheartalongwiththeirsimplewords,“don’tworry,mydear,we’llhelpyou.”

Atlast,Iaskedforsickleavefor2daysandgotoveritsoon.Withtheearnestaidofmyclassmatesandteachers,Icaughtupwithothersbeforelong.

Doyouhavesuchafriend,orareyousuchapersonwho’salwaysreadytoofferahelpinghand?Onlywhenwerealizethemeaningoflifeliesinwhatwegiveratherthanwhatwegetwillwenolongerbelonelyinthismagicalsociety.Keepinmindthatloveisthebestpolicy.57/60

Toughasthesufferingis,wewillfeelmuchbetterwhenfriendsarearoundus.

Oneday,whenwewereplayingbasketball,anaccidenthappened—Lannesgotwrenchedinhisankle.Fromthepainfullookonhisface,weknewitwasserious.Withouthesitation,FenixandIraisedhimupandhelpedhimwalktotheclinic.Butunluckily,thedoctorwasout.Weknewifwedidn’ttakeactionatoncetheinjurywouldgetworse.Soweplacedsomecold-packonhisankle.Soonafter,thedoctorcamebackandgaveussomedirectionsandthenwetookhimtotheclassroom.

Wewillneverwalkalone.Wheneverwegethurtandfa