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1、Task: Make Correction and Comments on the competition ”Review on Forrest Gump”(Author:林嘉欣13商英2班37号) Production Time: Wednesday 3rd December, 2014,Group Member,董佩仪：2班 李贞燕：2班 李佩怡：2班27号 林静雯：2班38号(组长) 钟彩英：2班63号 祝金凤：2班 制作时间：2014年12月3日星期三,Arrangement,钟彩英：找词语和语法错误（成品审阅） 祝金凤：找词语和语法错误（成品审阅） 李佩怡：文章调理和脉络审查 林静雯

2、：文章调理和脉络审查 董佩仪：文章美化 李贞燕：文章美化 林静雯：文章最后核对和评点审查 注：请全部组员附上评点,Forrest Gump,“Life was like a box of chocolate, you never know what youre gonna get.” a saying goes by Gumps mother as tought us a truth that each one has his own orbit of life and its unque! Therefore, Keeping it into his heart, Forest Gump w

3、orked steadily to step out a moracle life which belongs to him forever, although with low IQ and a handicapped leg. From the movie, we can know that Forrest Gump was born with a ordinary characteristic and even unfair. But It was fair that he knew the life more early, more impressive than other peop

4、le, like his lover Jenny and his captain Dan. So his attitude toward the difficulty of life was completedly different from them. Compare with Gumps inner peace, Captain Dan, had a same suffering with Gump was complaining everything all the time, even about the event that Gump saved him from the war.

5、 There was nothing changed after your complaining. For the Childhood, Forrest Gump knew it very well. Thats why Forrest Gump could handle every trouble without any emotion of anxiety, sadness and blame. I very appreciate his spirit of “Looks pale all and be himself.” Finally, Forrest Gump run fastly

6、 and become a football althelete after a series of running. People arround him were cheering “run! run!” We can see a winner smile on his face from a passer-bys side. We were moved by his great achievement after saving his perseverance and firm will. He have done it! Not be bound to success directly

7、 but through a long term struggle and never give up on this bitter sweet road. We should cheer for him and even think about ourselves. Did we stick to doing one thing all the time? This is another spirit I learned from Forrest GumpPerseverance. In short, Forrest Gump is a good movie. (Author: Lin Ji

8、axin林嘉欣),钟彩英： 身份：13商英2班63号 任务：词语和语法错误 成品审阅 页数：3,祝金凤： 身份：13商英2班号 任务：词语和语法错误 成品审阅 页数：3,评点： 句子基本意思能表达出来，但较口语化，卷面较潦草，且作者较粗心，简单错误和语法错误较多，完成后应细心检查。,修改痕迹和错误分析： “Life was(is时态) like a box of chocolate, you never know what youre gonna(going to表达) get.” a saying goes(told表达) by Gumps mother has tought(taught拼

9、写) us a truth that each one has his own orbit of life and its unique! Therefore, Keeping(keeping拼写) it into his heart, Forest Gump worked steadily to step out a miracle life which belongs to him forever, although with low IQ and a handicapped leg. From the movie, we can know that Forrest Gump was bo

10、rn with a(an语法) ordinary characteristic and its even unfair to him. But It was fair that he knew the life more early(earlier拼写), more impressive than other people, like his lover Jenny and his captain Dan. So his attitude toward the difficulty of life was completedly(completely拼写) different from the

11、m. Compare(被动compared语法) with Gumps inner peace, Captain Dan, had a same suffering with Gump(改为who also suffered so much表达) was complaining everything all the time, even about the event that Gump saved him from the war.,There was nothing changed after your complaining(complaint单词). For(During) the C

12、hildhood(his childhood运用), Forrest Gump knew it very well. Thats why Forrest Gump could handle every trouble without any emotion of anxiety, sadness and blame. I very appreciate his spirit of “Looks pale all and be himself.” Finally, Forrest Gump run fastly(ran fast时态) and become(became时态) a footbal

13、l althelete(football player表达) after a series of running. People arround(around单词) him were cheering “run! run!” We can see a winner smile(shining and confident smile表达) on his face from a passer-bys side(删除). We were moved by his great achievement after saving his perseverance and firm will. He hav

14、e(had时态) done it! Not be bound to success directly but through a long term struggle and never give up on this bitter sweet road(road with bitter and sweaty表达). We should cheer for him and even think about ourselves. Did we stick to doing one thing all the time? This is another spirit I learned from

15、Forrest GumpPerseverance. In short, Forrest Gump is a good movie.,“Life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what youre going to get.” a saying told by Gumps mother has taught us a truth that each one has his own orbit of life and its unique! Therefore, keeping it into his heart, Forest Gump w

16、orked steadily to step out a miracle life which belongs to him forever, although with low IQ and a handicapped leg. From the movie, we can know that Forrest Gump was born with an ordinary characteristic and its even unfair to him. But It was fair that he knew the life more earlier, more impressive t

17、han other people, like his lover Jenny and his captain Dan. So his attitude toward the difficulty of life was completely different from them. Compared with Gumps inner peace, Captain Dan, who also suffered so much was complaining everything all the time, even about the event that Gump saved him from

18、 the war.There was nothing changed after your complaint. During his childhood, Forrest Gump knew it very well. Thats why Forrest Gump could handle every trouble without any emotion of anxiety, sadness and blame. I very appreciate his spirit of “Looks pale all and be himself.”,Finally, Forrest Gump r

19、an fast and became a football player after a series of running. People around him were cheering “run! run!” We can see a shining and confident smile on his face from a passer-bys side. We were moved by his great achievement after saving his perseverance and firm will. He has done it! Not be bound to

20、 success directly but through a long term struggle and never give up on this road with bitter and sweaty. We should cheer for him and even think about ourselves. Did we stick to doing one thing all the time? This is another spirit I learned from Forrest GumpPerseverance. In short, Forrest Gump is a

21、good movie.,修正后（钟彩英；祝金凤）：,林静雯： 身份：13商英2班38号 任务：文章条理和脉络审查 页数：6,李佩怡： 身份：13商英2班27号 任务：文章条理和脉络审查 页数：6,董佩仪 身份：13商英 任务：文章美化 页数：6,李贞燕： 身份：13商英 任务：文章美化 页数：6,林静雯（组长）：文章最后核对和评点审查,注：此部分将由以下组员共同合作完成,评点： 纵观全文，虽然作者对于电影的情节记忆清晰，但作文时条理不清晰，重点不突出，表达暧昧，过于啰嗦，找不到重点。下面将详细分析各段： 第一段：引用Forrest妈妈的话，但与中心思想联系不上。应在文章开头加一段中心段，开门见

22、山。 第二段：作者主要想通过与他人的对比，突出Forrest的人生态度和道路选择，但依然表达不到位。 第三段：长篇大论，应该分为两段。首先分析Forrest成功的原因，引用实例，说明毅力的重要性。然后另立一段写与Forrest相比，我们自己的情况和Forrest对我们的启发。 第四段：可有可无。,After watching the movie “Forrest Gump”, what impressed me most is Forrests perseverance. (补) “Life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what you

23、re going to get.” a saying told by Gumps mother has taught us a truth that each one has his own orbit of life and its unique! Therefore, keeping it into his heart, Forest Gump worked steadily to step out a miracle life which belongs to him forever, although with low IQ and a handicapped leg. 重点不突出，引

24、用不到位。此段应改为： “Life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what youre going to get.” Forrests mother always said, so did Forrest believe. Therefore, keeping it in mind, although with low IQ and defective body, when faced with changeable life filled with frustration and disappointment, Forrest didn

25、t complain or stand still, but rather he just kept going. That is the so-called perseverance.,修改痕迹和错误分析：,From the movie, we can know that Forrest Gump was born with an ordinary characteristic and its even unfair to him. But It was fair that he knew the life more earlier, more impressive than other p

26、eople, like his lover Jenny and his captain Dan. So his attitude toward the difficulty of life was completely different from them. Compared with Gumps inner peace, Captain Dan, who also suffered so much was complaining everything all the time, even about the event that Gump saved him from the war. T

27、here was nothing changed after your complaint. During his childhood, Forrest Gump knew it very well. Thats why Forrest Gump could handle every trouble without any emotion of anxiety, sadness and blame. I very appreciate his spirit of “Looks pale all and be himself.” 写与他人的对比，但表达过于啰嗦。此段应改为： This movie

28、 portrayed various people for us. A case in point is Lt. Dan, a frustrated man dropped from an ambitious captain, a disabled man dropped from a strong man, complained about everything around him, even about Forrests saving his life from the battle. Compared with him, Forrest, who lived life to the f

29、ull from his childhood to the adulthood, showed everyone the definition of perseverance and attitude towards a changeable life-If you dont know what you should do, just keep going and never give up and opportunities will come.,Finally, Forrest Gump ran fast and became a football player after a serie

30、s of running. People around him were cheering “run! run!” We can see a shining and confident smile on his face from a passer-bys side. We were moved by his great achievement after saving his perseverance and firm will. He has done it! Not be bound to success directly but through a long term struggle

31、 and never give up on this road with bitter and sweaty. We should cheer for him and even think about ourselves. Did we stick to doing one thing all the time? This is another spirit I learned from Forrest GumpPerseverance. In short, Forrest Gump is a good movie. 此段应该分两段论述，首先分析Forrest成功的原因，分析Forrest人生

32、，说明他的毅力让他永不放弃，抓住机会，最终获得成功，另一段用Forrest和我们自己相比，我们怎么样，又得到什么启发，应该怎么做。应改为（因文段过长，修正后的文段请看下页）：,Gone through Forrest s life, there is a swell of emotion within us. It is his perseverance that moved us most. From his childhood, keeping running, he ran away his leg braces and then ran into the university wher

33、e he became a good football player. Keeping running, he graduated from the college and joined the army. Keeping running, he survived the battle and kept his word with Bubba so that he ran Bubba Gump Shrimp Company and became a millionaire. Keeping running, he married to Jenny, who delivered a baby f

34、or him. This was Forrest life. Keeping going makes everything happened naturally. Being bullied, being defective, sorrow, pity and the death of people he loved never overwhelmed or defeated him. Reversely, he accepted the reality and kept going. It was his perseverance that brought the chances to hi

35、m again and again. Compared with him, can we strive and never give up? Can we not wander around the sorrow of the tragedy that happened to us? Can we keep running against the wind and storm in life? If not, wed better reflect on ourselves. Learning from Forrest, we should try our best to strive for

36、our dreams and future. We should be brave when faced with troubles and frustration. We should tackle and conquer difficulties with perseverance to live life to the full. Perseverance is really a meaningful course for us.,After watching the movie “Forrest Gump”, what impressed me most is Forrests per

37、severance. “Life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what youre going to get.” Forrests mother always said, so did Forrest believe. Therefore, keeping it in mind, although with low IQ and defective body, when faced with changeable life filled with frustration and disappointment, Forrest didnt

38、 complain or stand still, but rather he just kept going. That is the so-called perseverance. This movie portrayed various people for us. A case in point is Lt. Dan, a frustrated man dropped from an ambitious captain, a disabled man dropped from a strong man, complained about everything around him, e

39、ven about Forrests saving his life from the battle. Compared with him, Forrest, who lived life to the full from his childhood to the adulthood, showed everyone the definition of perseverance and attitude towards a changeable life-If you dont know what you should do, just keep going and never give up

40、 and opportunities will come.,修正后的成文（2页）：,Gone through Forrest s life, there is a swell of emotion within us. It is his perseverance that moved us most. From his childhood, keeping running, he ran away his leg braces and than ran into the university where he became a good football player. Keeping ru

41、nning, he graduated from the college and joined the army. Keeping running, he survived the battle and kept his word with Bubba so that he ran Bubba Gump Shrimp Company and became a millionaire. Keeping running, he married to Jenny, who delivered a baby for him. This was Forrest life. Keeping going m

42、akes everything happened naturally. Being bullied, being defective, sorrow, pity and the death of people he loved never overwhelmed or defeated him. Reversely, he accepted the reality and kept going. It was his perseverance that brought the chances to him again and again. Compared with him, can we s

43、trive and never give up? Can we not wander around the sorrow of the tragedy that happened to us? Can we keep running against the wind and storm in life? If not, wed better reflect on ourselves. Learning from Forrest, we should try out best to strive for our dreams and future. We should be brave when

44、 faced with the troubles and frustration. We should tackle and conquer difficulties with perseverance to live life to the full. Perseverance is really a meaningful course for us.,After watching the movie “Forrest Gump”, what impressed me most is Forrests perseverance. 开门见山，呈现主题 “Life is like a box o

45、f chocolate, you never know what youre going to get.” Forrests mother always said, so did Forrest believe. Therefore, keeping it in mind, although with low IQ and defective body, when faced with changeable life filled with frustration and disappointment, Forrest didnt complain or stand still, but ra

46、ther he just kept going. That is the so-called perseverance.引用电影对白，扣题论述 This movie portrayed various people for us. A case in point is Lt. Dan, a frustrated man dropped from an ambitious captain, a disabled man dropped from a strong man, complained about everything around him, even about Forrests sa

47、ving his life from the battle. Compared with him, Forrest, who lived life to the full from his childhood to the adulthood, showed everyone the definition of perseverance and attitude towards a changeable life-If you dont know what you should do, just keep going and never give up and opportunities will come.与丹中