高中英语写作公开课课件

GuideinWritingTeachingObjectives(教学目标）Bytheendofthislessonyou’llbeableto■

findoutthemistakesofthecompositionsgiven.■

findoutwhatproblemscauseyounottogethighermarksinyourwriting.■knowsomepracticalwaystoimproveacomposition.■feellessscaredinwriting.ThewomanIadmiremost

MotherTeresaismyfavoritewomen.Sheisofmiddleheightandsheisbeautiful.ShecomesfromMacedonia.Shelivedfrom1910.8.26to1997.9.5.whenshewasyoung,shelearnedreligion.She’swarm-hearted.Once,sheteachedinIndiaformanyyears.In1950,shesetuptheMissionariesofcharitytohelpthepoorinCalcutta.Shedevotedtohelpthepoor、thepatiences、thehomelesspersonsandthedeadpersons.Becauseofthose,in1979,shegottheNobelpeaceprizein1997.shediedinIndia.Iadmiredher.InthefutureIwantbecomeasheraperson.Fromnow,Iintendtogoodgoodstudyanddaydayup.

ThewomanIadmiremost

MotherTeresaismyfavoritewomen.Sheisofmiddleheightandsheisbeautiful.ShecomesfromMacedonia.Shelivedfrom1910.8.26to1997.9.5.shelearnedreligionlongbefore.She’swarm-hearted.Once,sheteachedinIndiaformanyyears.In1950,shesetuptheMissionariesofcharitytohelpthepoorinCalcutta.Shedevotedtohelpthepoor、thepatiences、thehomelesspersonsandthedeadpersons.Becauseofthose,in1979,shegottheNobelpeaceprizein1997.shediedinIndia.Iadmiredher.InthefutureIwantbecomeasheraperson.Fromnow,Iintendtogoodgoodstudyanddaydayup.

MainproblemsleadingtolowscoresProblem1:

Chaoticsentencestructure(句型结构混乱）Problem2:Chinglish(汉式英语）Problem3:Simplesentence，lackofadvancedvocabularies(句式单一，缺乏高级词汇)英语句子结构

句子的灵魂简单句I并列句II复合句III

youwillsucceed.

youwillsucceed.

youwillsucceed.123Ex：努力学习，你会成功。Studyinghard,Ifyoustudyhard,Studyhard,

and连接词连接词只有一个主语（或并列主语）和一个谓语（或并列谓语）简单句：

HeoftenreadsEnglishinthemorning.TomandMikeareAmericanboys.Shelikesdrawingandoftendrawspicturesforthewallnewspapers.主语及物动词系动词宾语表语不及物动词宾语+宾补间宾+直宾宾语

简单句的五种基本句型第一种句型：S+VThesunrises.Herunsinthepark.第二种句型：S+V+OHeplaysthepianoeverymorning.Iknowhimverywell.Theywanttogo.Hestoppedwriting.第三种句型：S+V+IO+DOMyfatherboughtmeacar.第四种句型：S+V+O+C(补充说明宾语的状态）Iwillmakeyouhappy.Weshouldkeeptheclassroomclean.Sheheardhimsinging.Iwanthertocome.第五种句型：S+V+PSheisastudent.Hehasbecomeanengineer.Ittastessweet.Hisfacegoesred.

注意：系动词除了be动词外，还包括become,turn,look,seem,appear,sound,taste,smell,remain,prove,keep,fall.并列句：由并列连词把两个或两个以上的简单句连在一起的句子叫做并列句。HehelpsmeandIhelphim.注意：不同的并列连词表示并列分句之间的不同关系，根据并列分句之间的关系不同，并列分句可以分为四种。Henotonlygaveusalotofadvice,butalsohelpedustostudyEnglish.表示联合关系的并列句

常用的连词有and(同，和),when(=andjustatthistime就在这时，然后),notonly…but(also)…(不仅……而且……),neither…nor…（既不……也不……）等。这类分句之间是顺承关系或并列关系。如：Weboughtherabirthdaypresent,andshelikeditverymuch.Neitherdidthenaughtyboygohomenordidhisparentscometosearchforhim.

Iwasjustleavingwhenthetelephonerang.Notonlymyfather,butalsomygrandpagotredroses.表示转折关系的并列句这类并列句常用but（但是；可是），yet（可是；然而），while（而）等来连接，后面分句与前面分句之间有意义上的转折关系。Shesaidshewouldbelate,yetshearrivedontime.

Certainlyheapologized,however,Iwon'tforgivehim.

Iliketeawhileshelikescoffee.表示选择关系的并列句EitheryouaremadorIam.Youmustgoearly,otherwiseyouwillmissthebus.常用的连词有or,either…or…..，otherwise,orelse(否则）,等连接.如：Willhestillbethereorwillhehavegoneaway?Takethisbusorelseyouwon’tgetthereintime.表示因果关系的并列句

这类并列句常用并列连词so,for等连接，后面分句与前面分句之间有因果关系。如：Motherwasill,sofathercookedforusinstead.Theyhadoftenheardofelephants,buttheyhadneverseenone,forbeingblind,howcouldthey?Heworkeddayandnight,therefore,hewasabletobuythesportscar.

复合句状语从句定语从句名词性从句“竹枝”复合句：

复合句(complexsentence)

是由主句＋从句构成，它是英语中比较复杂的句子结构。一般来说，英语中一个句子只能有一个谓语，如果出现两个谓语动词，那么其中一个谓语动词只能以从句的形式或并列句或非谓语动词的形式出现。所谓从句是指从属于主句的句子，由从属连词连接。从句的种类有很多，但根据其性质和作用可以分为状语从句、定语从句、名词性从句。Afterthestudentswereallinthechemistrylab,theteacherbroughtoutthreebottles.Cornisaveryusefulplantthatcanbepreparedinmanydifferentways.状语从句（Adverbialcause):从句用作状语Whenyoucrossamainroad,youmustbecareful.Sitdownwhereveryoulike.AsIdidn’tknowtheway,Iaskedapoliceman.You’llbelate,unlessyouhurry.WeintendtogoUS,evenifairfaresareexpensive.Thenewsworriedhimsomuchthathedidn’tsleepatallforthewholenight.Theywrotethenoticeinseverallanguagessothatforeignerscouldunderstandit.定语从句（AttributiveClauses):由关系代词或关系副词引导的从句，其作用是作定语修饰主句的某个名词或代词，相当于形容词，所以又称为形容词性从句，一般跟在它所修饰的先行词后面。定语从句可分为限制性定语从句和非限制性定语从句。Ishethemanwho/thatwantstoseeyou?Pleasepassmethebookwhosecoverisgreen.Isthisthereasonwhy(forwhich)herefusedouroffer?

Liquidwaterchangestovapor,whichiscalledevaporation.

Aseveryoneknows,Chinaisabeautifulcountrywithalonghistory.在句子中起名词作用的句子叫名词性从句(NounClauses）。名词性从句的功能相当于名词词组，它在复合句中能担任主语、宾语、表语、同位语、介词宾语等，因此根据它在句中不同的语法功能，名词性从句又可分别称为主语从句、宾语从句、表语从句和同位语从句。名词性从句Thatthedrivercouldnotcontrolhiswarwasobvious.

Whowillwinthematchisstillunknown.

Itisknowntoushowhebecameawriter.

HehastoldmethathewillgotoShanghaitomorrow.

IfeelitapitythatIhaven'tbeentotheget-together.Rawmaterialiswhatwearebadlyinneedof.Itlooksasifitisgoingtorain.Thefactthathehasnotbeenseenrecentlydisturbseveryoneinhisoffice.classroomactivity

GoingUp句子冲冲冲动词短语简单句扩展变换中译英1.现代化的交通系统是否能解决问题还不得而知.(remain)Whetheramoderntrafficsystemcansolvetheproblemoftransportationremainsaquestion.2.无论面对何种挑战，他总是全力以赴，这使大家印象深刻。(impress)Whateverchallengeshemayface,healwaystrieshisbest,whichdeeplyimpresseseveryone.3.学习英语几年后,许多学生仍然觉得用英语和外国人交流有点困难.(feel)ManystudentsstillfeeltheyhavesomedifficultyincommunicatingwithforeignersinEnglishafterlearningthelanguageforyears.复合句、并列句、简单句之间的相互转化1.Lucycan’tsingtheEnglishsong”YesterdayOnceMore”.AndLilycan’tsingit,either.(改为简单句）2.Ihavetostudyharder,orIshallnotcatchupwithmyclassmates.（改为含状语从句的复合句）3.WewillorganizeallkindsofactivitiesinourEnglishclub.WecannotonlypractisebutalsolearnmoreEnglishintheactivities.(改为含定语从句的复合句）4.（1)79.3%ofthesurveyednetizenssaythattheirmainmotivationistohelptheirparentstoliveabetterlife.(2)67.7%claimthattheyworkharderinordertochangetheirownfate.5.(1)Therewasonceafamousdetective.(2)HewasnamedSherlockHolmes.(3)HelivedinLondon.(4)Thetimewasattheendofthenineteenthcentury.6.(1)TheotherdaywehadanEnglishspeechcontest.(2)Iwonthefirstprizeinthecontest.复合句、并列句、简单句之间的相互转化1.Lucycan’tsingtheEnglishsong”YesterdayOnceMore”.AndLilycan’tsingit,either.NeitherLucynorLilycansingtheEnglishsong”YesterdayOnceMore”.2.Ihavetostudyharder,orIshallnotcatchupwithmyclassmates.IhavetostudyharderinorderthatIcancatchupwithmyclassmates.3.WewillorganizeallkindsofactivitiesinourEnglishclub.WecannotonlypractisebutalsolearnmoreEnglishintheactivities.(改为含定语从句的复合句）WewillorganizeallkindsofactivitiesinourEnglishclubinwhichwecannotonlypractisebutalsolearnmoreEnglishintheactivities.4.（1)79.3%ofthesurveyednetizenssaythattheirmainmotivationistohelptheirparentstoliveabetterlife.(2)67.7%claimthattheyworkharderinordertochangetheirownfate.79.3%ofthesurveyednetizenssaythattheirmainmotivationistohelptheirparentstoliveabetterlifewhile67.7%claimthattheyworkharderinordertochangetheirownfate.5.(1)Therewasonceafamousdetective.(2)HewasnamedSherlockHolmes.(3)HelivedinLondon.(4)Thetimewasattheendofthenineteenthcentury.TherewasonceafamousdetectivenamedSherlockwholivedinLondonattheendofthenineteenthcentury.6.(1)TheotherdaywehadanEnglishspeechcontest.(2)Iwonthefirstprizeinthecontest.TheotherdaywehadanEnglishspeechcontestinwhichIwonthefirstprizeinthecontest.4.这所学校规定:学生不许将手机带进校园.(make)

5.清华大学的目标是培养既拥有专业知识又具备独立思考能力的学生。(aim)

6.这家店与众不同之处在于他提供更多的服务。(offer)4.这所学校规定:学生不许将手机带进校园.(make)Theschoolmakesitarulethatstudentsarenotallowedtotakemobilephones/cellphonestotheschool/campus.5.清华大学的目标是培养既拥有专业知识又具备独立思考能力的学生。(aim)Theaimof

Qinghua

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istoequipstudentsnotonlywithprofessionalknowledgebutalsotheabilityofindependentthinking.

6.这家店与众不同之处在于他提供更多的服务。(offer)Whatmakestheshopdifferentisthatitoffersmoreservice(s)句子的充实：

一篇好文章必然是内容充实，形式多样的。学生尽可能避免写出内容简单，形式单调的句子。我们可以朝以下几个方面努力1.加强细节描写的意识●Jack’spresentwasrefused.--------whatmadeJacksadwasthathispresentboughtforAndywasrefused.●Mr.LiPinggaveusalectureinthehallonFriday.--------Mr.LiPinggaveusalectureinthehallonFridayinordertohelpstudentslearnEnglishbetter2.对所表达的句子加以补充说明●Itisdangeroustowalkhomealone.-----Itisdangeroustowalkhomealone,especiallyinthedark.●IprefertogotoShanghaibyplanethanbytrain.------IprefertogotoShanghaibyplanethanbytrain,becauseitismuchfasterandmorecomfortable.3.对所表达的内容适当地加以评论，充实句子。●Mr.Liwillgiveusareport.-------Mr.Liwillgiveusareport,whichwillinfluenceusalot.-------Mr.Liwillgiveusareport,whichwillhaveaninfluenceonourstudy.其它倒装句变化省略句强调句

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1要点扩展（09全国卷单选改编）RevisionThecomputerwasusedinteaching.Teachers`energywassaved.Studentsbecamemoreinterestedinthelessons.Thecomputerwasusedinteaching.Asaresult,notonlywasteachers`energysaved,butstudentsbecamemoreinterestedinthelessons.AsaresultnotonlybutEx.1大“展”身手（2012四川书面表达）Ex.2一句话表达：ThetwomainproblemsinmystudyarethatIfeelitdifficulttolearnwordsbyheart,andthatIoftenfeelnervouswhenspeakingEnglish.（2012湖南卷单选改编）句式变换1、Icamehere.2、Irealizedthisplacewasfamous.3、Itwasfamousfornotonlyitsbeautybutalsoitsweather.1、正常句子：IdidnotrealizethisplacewasfamousfornotonlyitsbeautybutalsoitsweatheruntilIcamehere.2、倒装NotuntilIcameheredidIrealizethisplacewasfamousfornotonlyitsbeautybutalsoitsweather.3、强调句ItwasnotuntilIcameherethatIrealizedthisplacewasfamousfornotonlyitsbeautybutalsoitsweather.Ex.3furtherEx.4一句话表达：Lihua,ournewEnglishteacher,speaksadialectwhichwefindhardtounderstand.Homework假设你班本学期英语强报的主题是“ThewomanIadmiremost”，请你根据表格信息，写一篇介绍特蕾莎修女（MotherTeresa)的英语短文读写任务型写作模板

标题第一段:第二段:第三段:

概括所给短文内容要点[约30字]过渡词引出主题句---自己的观点---理由

[约90字]总结句

[约30字]第一段：概括所给短文内容要点（记叙类）注意：利用原文中所给的语言材料，用自己的话来写；概括后的文章意思要通顺，行文要连贯。写作具体方法和要求:第一段概括要做到开门见山:例如:Accordingtothepassage,Thisarticleismainlyabout…Thewriterstatesthat…2.

第一段概括要抓住要点,语言精练,列出原文作者观点或内容。

Inthispassage,thewritermainlytellsushisexperienceoffishingandwastaughtanunforgettablelessonbyanoldman.

Heknewtheimportanceofpatienceandfinallygotsomefish.(33words）Myversionforthesummary1.Itoccurstomethatasimilarstoryofminehappened3yearsagoandtaughtmealesson.2.Ihadasimilarexperienceatonetime,too.3.AsfarasIamconcerned,Ihaveasimilarexperience.4.Ihavesuchasimilarexperience,too.5.Ihaveasimilarexperiencetothewriter’s.6.Ialsohaveasimilarexperience.Wemaywritelikethese:第二段：怎样写过渡句Myversionforthetransitionalsentence:

Ialsohaveanexperienceaboutbeingpatient.Iwouldlikeyou,thereader,toshareitwithme.Howtowriteanendingparagraph

Allinall,patienceisveryimportant.Everyoneshouldhavepatiencetodoeverything.

(Pointoutthemainidea)Myversionfortheendingparagragh第三段：怎样写结尾段

Ihaveasimilarexperience.OnceIwaitedforthebusatthestopfor30minutes,nobuscame.Icouldn’twaitanylongeranddecidedtowalktoschool.ButnosoonerhadIleftthanthebusarrived.IthoughtifIhadwaitedforonemoreminute,Iwouldhavecaughtit.IfIwantedtotakethenextbus,Iwouldhavetowaitforanother30minutes.OnlythendidIrealizetheimportanceofpatience.Beingimpatientwillwastealltheeffortsthatwehavemade.Patiencealsoplaysanimportantpartinourstudyandwork.Withitwecanachievegreatersuccess.(110words)

Now,wheneverIamtolosemypatience,I’llthinkoftheexperienceofwaitingforabus.(18words)

(161words)第二段:过渡词引出主题句---自己的观点---理由开头用语（议论文）Idoagreewiththeauthor…Insomeway,Iagreewith…,but…Thisopinionsoundsrightbutishardlypractical.Itisdefinitelynotlikethat.Asamatteroffact,…Toagreatextent,I’mforthewriter’idea.Inmyopinion,…Frommypersonalpointofview…AsfarasI’mconcerned……

第三段[最后一段]:总结句开头用语：Inconclusion,…Inshort,…Tomakealongstoryshort,…Ingeneral,…Inaword,…Inbrief简单扼要地,…Onthewhole,…Allinall,……模板1：观点对比

Thetopicabout…isbecomingmoreandmorepopularinourschoolrecently.Therearetwosidesofopinionaboutit.Somestudentsprefertoconsiderdoingsth.(Somestudentssay…istheirfavorite.)Theythinkthat…(理由一).What’smore,…(理由二).

Moreover,…(理由三)However,othersbelieve…isabetterchoiceforthreereasons.(然而，其余的人认为做某事是一种较好的选择，有三个方面的理由)tobeginwith,…(理由一).Next,..Inaddition,…Frommypointofview,theformerissurelyawisechoice.Thereasonisthat…(或者用：AsfarasIamconcerned,Ifirmlysupporttheviewthat…(依我来看，我坚决支持这种观点…that引导同位语从句)模板２：好处与坏处的对比1.Inrecentyears,…hasbeenpopular.Therearemanyadvantagesin….First,…Second,….Third,…However,there’resomedisadvantages.….(之一).

Besides,….(之二).Also,….(之三)Inmyopinion,itistruethatadvantagesaremorethandisadvantages.(依我看，的确是好处多于坏处)Ithink…Onebigadvantageof…isthat…./Oneobviousadvantageof…is…./Finally,…Whileitistruethat….hasmanyadvantages,itisalsoimportanttorealizethat….(虽然某事确实有许多好处，但是意识到…也很重要。模板３:问题与建议

1.Inrecentdays,wehavetofaceaproblemthat…(近来，我们面临这样一个问题…that引导同位语从句).解决办法：Withthehelpofmoderntechnology,wenowhavemanymeanstosolveit.Bydoing….,wecan…What’sthemostimportantisthat…结论：inaword,itisclear/obviousthat…Onlywhen…canwe….模板４:要求论述两个对立的观点并给出自己的看法。

1.有一些人认为…2.另一些人认为…3.我的看法…

Thetopicof①____________（主题）isbecomingmoreandmorepopularrecently.Therearetwosidesofopinionsaboutit.SomepeoplesayAistheirfavorite.Theyholdtheirviewforthereasonof②____________（支持A的理由一）Whatismore,③(理由二).Moreover,④_____________(理由三).

WhileothersthinkthatBisabetterchoiceinthefollowingthreereasons.Firstly,_________(支持B的理由一).Secondly(besides),⑥______________（理由二）.Thirdly(finally),⑦_____________(理由三).

Frommypointofview,Ithink⑧__________(我的观点）.Thereasonisthat⑨__________(原因).Asamatteroffact,therearesomeotherreasonstoexplainmychoice.Forme,theformerissurelyawisechoice.

模板５:给出一个观点，要求考生反对这一观点

Somepeoplebelievethat①____________（观点一）.Forexample,theythink②___________（举例说明）．Anditwillbringthem③_______________(为他们带来的好处).

Inmyopinion,Ineverthinkthisreasoncanbethepoint.Foronething,④__________(我不同意该看法的理由一).Foranotherthing,⑤____________(反对的理由之二)．

FormallwhatIhavesaid/Inaword/Inconclusion,Iagreetothethoughtthat⑥__________(我对文章所讨论主题的看法)．模板６：解决方法题型

要求考生列举出解决问题的多种途径

１.

问题现状

２.怎样解决(解决方案的优缺点)

Inrecentdays,wehavetofaceaproblemA,whichisbecomingmoreandmoreserious.First,_________(说明Ａ的现状)．Second,___________(举例进一步说明现状)

ConfrontedwithA,weshouldtakeaseriesofeffectivemeasurestocopewiththesituation.Foronething,_____________(解决方法一).Foranotherthing____________(解决方法二).Finally,______________(解决方法三).

Personally,Ibelievethat____________(我的解决方法).Consequently,I’mconfidentthatabrightfutureisawaitingusbecause______________(带来的好处).

模板７：说明利弊题型

这种题型往往要求先说明一下现状，再对比事物本身的利弊，有时也会单从一个角度（利或弊）出发，最后往往要求考生表明自己的态度（或对事物前景提出预测）

１.说明事物现状

２.

事物本身的优缺点（或一方面）

３.你对现状（或前景）的看法

NowadaysmanypeoplepreferAbecauseithasasignificantroleinourdailylife.Generally,itsadvantagescanbeseenasfollows.First___________(Ａ的优点之一).Besides_____________（Ａ的优点之二）.

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