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1、作文讲评,西安交通大学附属中学 吴旭飞,Contents,1. Understanding the topic,教育部倡导学生:每天锻炼一小时;健康工作五十年;幸 福工作一辈子。请你根据以上提示,用英语准备一份发言 稿,向同学们讲述一下阳光体育活动的有关情况,并就高 中学生是否需要每天花一小时锻炼,谈谈你的看法及理由。 注意: 发言稿应包括以上所有信息,要有适当发挥。 词数:100左右。 参考词汇: 阳光体育活动:a national student sports program; 教育部: the Ministry of Education,2. Analysis of students w
2、ritings,A good writing,2.1 Structure,Speech,Greetings,Hello, everyone! Today, I will talk about something about a national student sports program. As we all know, the Ministry of Education encouraged us to do sport an hour every day. They think it will make us healthy and live happily. I agree with
3、them. In my opinion, doing exercise is a very important thing in our life. Although we senior high school students are very busy with studying, we should spend time doing exercise, because our body is more important than our grades. If we cant have a healthy body, we will study more difficultly, suc
4、h as sleeping in class. However, if we do sport an hour every day, we will have a good body, then we will not get tired and have a bad life. All in all, do sport is the most important. Dont be lazy, just do sport now! Come on! (Zhang Jingtian),The Ministry of Education said that students should exer
5、cise for an hour every day so that we could be healthy and happy forever. My opinion about it is that we really need to exercise every day. Our schoolwork is very difficult for us. We all need a healthy body so that we could study hard. Besides, exercising can help us think more clearly. We should a
6、ll exercise for an hour every day. If youre fond of running, you could run for thousands meters on the playground. If you dont like running, you could try to dance, it could keep you fit and healthy. Football is also a good choice. Football is a very popular sport now. Nearly every boy in our school
7、 could play football very well. Sometimes we might have football matches. Football is also a healthy sport, you could also try it to keep healthy if you want to. Health is very important to us all. We all need to exercise every day! Lets go exercise! (Zhang Shuhua),Introduction,Body,Conclusion,Compl
8、eteness Including all the key points general statement specific details Coherence: Logical relation between linguistic units Avoiding redundancy,2.2 Content,Analysis 1,I think high school students should spend one hour exercising every day. Because exercising is necessary to us, and we need a relax
9、for our bodies.,Health is very important to us all. We all need to exercise every day. Lets go exercise!,Too general!,Sample: As far as I am concerned, it is highly necessary for high school students to work out an hour every day. As the saying goes: “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy”. Spe
10、nding some time doing exercise every day can relieve ourselves from the pressure of study. For instance,Analysis 2,Students all over the world should spend an hour to exercise every day. It can help us to have a strong body to study. Many students joke about how less time they have to do homework, r
11、ather than how less time they have to do sports. If you dont have a healthy body, you will not study well.,Lack of coherence!,Although high school students are occupied with the homework, they can still manage to squeeze some time for exercise.,Analysis 3,Paragraph 1 It is said that the Ministry of
12、Education suggests students that they exercise for an hour every day, they will work healthily for fifty years, and they will lead a healthy life, too.,Paragraph 2 The government has held a national students sports program. According to the program, we have to do sports every day. It is great funny
13、because it has never been executed.,Redundancy!,2.3 Language,Analysis 1,Students should exercise for an hour every day. We all need to exercise every day! Lets go exercise! It is very important to take exercise everyday. Play sports an hour every day is most important, and an hour isnt very long for
14、 us. By the exercise, our physical health will increase, and we may hardly ever get the illness, then, we can pay more attention to study.,Lack of variety!,How to express your opinion?,Most students use: I think; in my opinion, I argue; We can also use: As far as I am concerned, as for me, for my pa
15、rt, personally speaking, in my view, I maintain that, as I see it, from my point of view; from where I stand,Analysis 2,They also provide many different sorts of exercises to let students choose. Also, exercising can provide us a spare time among the busy studying.,Unidiomatic expressions!,All sorts
16、 of exercise can be available for students to choose. We students can strike a balance between studying and exercising.,Analysis 2,Unidiomatic expressions!,It can also protect us from illness so that we can study efficiently. The Ministry of Education urges/calls on students to exercise an hour ever
17、y day.,It also can preserve us from illness in order to let us study with high quality. The Ministry of Education let students exercise an hour every day.,Analysis 3,All in all, health is the most important step lead to success. For instance, a short-time running in the morning, a football club and
18、so on.,I always feel tired and easily to be illness. From where I stand, exercising is not only do sport in your free time, you can also exercise in the PE class.,Grammatical mistakes!,表示顺序 first of all, to begin with, firstly, secondly, then, finally 表示对等、选择或递进关系 and, or, as well, also, besides, whats more, moreover, furthermore, in addit
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