北京英语高考情景作文植树_.ppt

1、,情景作文,假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。 注意：词数不少于60 提示词：郊区 suburbs,情景作文,假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。 注意：词数不少于60 提示词：郊区 s

2、uburbs,审中文信息,标题,图的顺序不能错！,词数,提示词,第一人称过去时,图1. 出发图2. 种树过程 图3. 安插提示牌 图4. 照相留念,审图,四幅图的先后顺序：,图1内容要点及细节,要点,出发,细节,清晨 骑车出发 风景和心情,Set out,Early in the morning on April 12th； suburbs; by bike；,图2内容要点及细节,要点,种树,细节,挖坑 搬树 种树 浇水,plant trees,arrive; dig holes; carry trees; water trees;,图3内容要点及细节,要点,安插提示牌,细节,安插提示牌 爱护

3、树木,put up a board,put up a board saying ”please protect trees”,图4内容要点及细节,要点,照相留念,细节,手里拿着种树工具 站在小树林和牌子旁 心情或感受,take photos,take photos; stand in a row with tools in hands; beside the board and trees,阅卷过程中发现的问题,时间和地点不清：on April 12th, suburbs,关键词错误：dig-dug，board,字数不足60词-1,无结尾-1,人称错-酌情扣分,时态错-降档,情景作文写作要求,

4、内容要点、上下文的连贯、词汇和句式的多样性及语言的准确性。,考试说明指出：,情景作文评分原则,先看内容定档,重点参考语言质量,注重整体语言运用能力,要点齐全，语言好，进三档以上 （12分以上）,缺要点，语言差，四档或五档 （11分以下）,情景作文各档范文,高考范文：April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all th

5、e way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering them. After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees.,定档：一档,Before leaving we took some photos to record our green actio

6、n. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel its our duty to protect and beautify our environment.,点评,Green Action in Our Class I am Li Hua from Class 1 Senior 3 in HongXing middle school. On April 12th our class organized an activity to plant trees in suburbs to make our

7、 country more beautiful. Early in the morning on April 12th, my classmates and I went to the suburbs by bicycle. And there was an awful lot of breath-taking scenery on our way which could be just appreciated in rural areas, green mountains, golden wheat field and so on, which brought us great joys.,

8、覆盖了所有内容要点，有细节描述，句式和词汇较丰富，所写内容连贯，结构清晰，体现较强的语言运用能力。 17-18分,When we got there, we went into working at once. Some of us dug holes to plant trees and some of us took the little trees to the holes. Whats more, there were also some careful girls watering the trees which were just planted. Thanks to our gr

9、eat efforts, all the trees were soon planted and two of our classmates put up a board reading “love and protect the trees” in front of the little forest made by us. After all the hard work, we also took photos of our whole class with tools in our hand in front of the trees. Exhausted but happy, we h

10、ad a significant day and I hope our country will be more beautiful because of the decorating of trees!,点评,Im Li Hua a student of Seniro 3 class of Hong Xing Middle School. In order to respond to the appealation of making our courntry greener, our class decided to go to suburbs to plant trees on Apri

11、l, 12th. Early in the morning, we went to the destination by bike. There are many trees and rice by the side of the road. On our way to there, we enjoyed the beautiful view and talked happily. As soon as we got there, we began to work. Some of us dug, some burried, some watered and the rest took the

12、 trees to places where need them. After planting trees, we chose an obvious place to make a sign read “ Protect treess” stand to prevent people from cutting trees. At last, we took photes in front of the trees. Almost worn out as we were, we extremely excited, for we did a qualification deed.,基本覆盖了全

13、部内容要点，细节描写不够充分，基本完成规定的写作任务。存在语法和用词等错误。 12 分,点评,Hong Xing middle school had an activity to make the country green than before on April 12nd. Class one greade three students made the action in suburbs. First of all, they met at country road in the morning and went to the suburbs by bike. After the arr

14、ived at the suburbs they began to planted the tree and watered the tree. While they finished planting, they made a sign beside the trees. The words in the sign are plase protect the trees. Finally they took some photos and back to the home. What a meaningful day!,要点描述不充分；尤其是第二幅图没有展开；所用句式和词汇有限；有语法等表述

15、错误，影响对内容的理解。 6分,好句子,When we got there, it was still early. We worked so hard that we finished the work quickly. After finishing planting trees, we put up a board reminding people of protecting the trees. Standing in front of the trees, we took a photo to record this meaningful activity. It was our d

16、uty to beautify our nation.,That was what I gain from our activity. The sweat rolled down from our neck, but we were still full of energy. Pleasure can be seen on our faces. We hoped that there will be more and more people to taking part in our action. To draw peoples attention, we also put up a sig

17、n which called on people to. We did the things as we had planned. Having done all these things, we. Having finished this Green Action, I realized that,Everyone got down to work as soon as we got there. From that day on It was high time we protected our environment.,特别提示,注意： 1、要点（细节） 2、时态人称 3、字数 4、结尾

18、 5、标题 6、给分（区分度） 7、卷面和书写,写作评分要点： 1、定档是关键 2、语言质量是关键 3、关键词是关键 4、要点齐全是关键,Good sentences,Tough as it was, everyone was devoted to the work and never complained about it. I think those beautiful moments are worth any sacrifice No sooner had we arrived there than everyone started planting trees,With high s

19、pirits, we set out on the bike in the early morning. Cycling along the road which was surrounded by green woods and fields, we gradually got close to our destinationWe believed that humans should keep a harmonious relationship with nature. The moment we arrived there, we began our Green Action.,To make this Green Action successful, we had prepared for a long time. On arriving there Looking at the trees I had planted, I felt a surge of satisfaction I had never experienced before. Im sure those beautiful moment