高考英语书面表达分类训练万能句型及模板

高考英语书面表达分类训练万能句型及模板(权威资料)一提高作文必背句型背诵下列语句常用文章开头的句型：1．Itiswell­knownthat众所周知，……。2．Thereisnodoubtthat毫无疑问，……。3．Somepeopleclaimthat有人认为……。4．Itisgenerallybelievedthat普遍认为……。5．Itiswidelyacceptedthat普遍认为……。6.Currentlythereisawidespreadconcernover...现在，人们普遍关注的问题是……。7．Withtherapidgrowingpopularityof...,thequalityofourliveshasbeenconsiderablychanged.随着……的快速普及，我们的生活质量已经发生了极大变化。8．Withthedevelopmentof...,anincreasingnumberofpeoplecometorealizethat..随着……的发展，越来越多的人意识到……。9．Nowpeopleingrowingnumbersarecomingtorealizethat...正在越来越多的人逐渐意识到……。10．SomepeoplethinkthatTobefrank,Icannotagreewiththeiropinionforthereasonsbelow.有人认为……，坦率地说，我不同意他们的观点，理由如下。11．Foryears,...hasbeenseenas...,butthingsarequitedifferentnow.多年以来，……一直被看着是……，但现在情况大不一样了。12．Lastweek,wemade/conducted/carriedoutasurveyabout...上周，我们做了一项关于……的调查。13．Recentlywehavehadadiscussionover...最近我们讨论了……这个问题。14．Accordingtoarecentsurvey,fourmillionpeopledieeachyearfromdiseaseslinkedtosmoking.依照最近的一项调查，每年有4000000人死于与吸烟有关的疾病。15．Thelatestsurveysshowthatquiteafewchildrenhaveunpleasantassociationswithhomework.最近的调查显示相当多的孩子对家庭作业没什么好感。常用于文章正文的句型：1．People’sviewson...varyfrompersontoperson.人们对……的观点因人而异。2．Asapopularsayinggoes,“Everycoinhastwosides.”常言道，“事物都是一分为二的。”3．Asaproverbsays,“Nopains,nogains”．俗话说，“不劳则无获。”4．Contrarytothepopularthought,Iprefer与普遍的想法正相反，我更喜欢……。5．IcannotentirelyagreewiththeideathatIbelieve….我不完全赞同这样的一个观点……，我认为……。6．Thereisnodenyingthefactthat...不可否认，……。7．Beforegivingmyopinion,Ithinkitisessentialtolookattheargumentofbothsides.在提出我自己的观点之前，我们有必要了解正反双方争论的焦点。8．Itishightimethatweplacedgreatemphasisontheimprovementof…到了改进……的时候了。9．Itishightimethatweputanendto...到了结束……的时候了。10．Thereisnoeasysolutiontotheproblemof...,but...mightbeuseful.对……这一问题，没有轻松解决的办法，但……或许有所益处。11．Itisessentialthateffectivemeasuresshouldbetakentopreventthesituation.有必要采取有效措施来阻止形势进一步恶化。12．Itissuggestedthatgreateffortsshouldbemadetocontrolthegrowthof...建议尽力控制出……的增长。13．Itishopedthatgreateffortsshouldbefocusedon...人们希望在……方面做出努力。常用于文章结尾的句型：1．Fromwhathasbeendiscussedabove,wemaysafelydrawtheconclusionthat根据上述讨论，我们可以得出结论，……。2．Takingintoaccountallthefactors,wemaysafelycometotheconclusionthat考虑到各个因素，我们可以得出结论，……。3．Judgingfromalltheevidenceoffered,wemaysafelyarriveat/reachtheconclusionthat根据所提供的证据来判断，我们可得出结论，……。4．Alltheevidencesupportsasoundconclusionthat所有证据都支持这样一个结论，……。5．Tosumup,wefindthat总之，我们认为……。6．Inshort/brief/conclusion/aword,简言之，……。表达个人观点的句型：1．AsfarasIamconcerned,Iagreewiththelatteropiniontosomeextent.就我个人而言，我赞同第二个观点。2．AsfarasIamconcerned,Iamreally/completelyinfavorofthepolicy.就我个人而言，我完全支持这项政策。3．Inmyopinion/view,weshould我认为我们应该……。4．Asforme,I．...至于我，我……。5．Frommypointofview,我认为……。6．Personally,Ithink我个人认为……。7．Myviewisthat我的观点是……。8．Iholdanegative/positiveviewof我对……持反对/肯定态度。9．Contrarytogenerallyacceptedviews,Iarguethat...与普遍的观点相反，我认为……。10．Itwouldbenaturaltothinkthat...,butitwouldbeabsurdtoclaimthat...人们很自然地认为，……，但据此就以为……却是很愚蠢的。11．Atfirstthought,itmayseemanattractiveidea,butonsecondthought,wefindthat...乍一看，这个观点很有吸引力，但再一想，我们发现……。图表作文常用句型：1．Thetable/diagram/graphshows/describes/reflectsthat该图表表明/描述/反映了……。2．Asisshowninthechart,...hasbeenontheincrease/decrease.此图表表明，……一直在增加/减少。3．Accordingtothefiguresgivenbythegraph,thenumberof...hasbeenrisingsteadily.从图表给出的数据看，……的数量在稳步增长。4．Thedata/figureslead(s)ustotheconclusionthat这些数据可以让我们得出这样的结论，……。5．Asisshown/exhibitedinthediagram/graph/table，正如图表中所展现的那样，……。6．Itisclear/apparentfromthetable/diagram/figuresthat该图表清楚地表明，……。7．A,whichaccountsfor...%,ranksthefirst;nextinlineisBwith...%,followedbyC,makingup...%;finallyD,E,Fat...%，...%and...%respectively.A占了……%，位居第一，第二位是B，占……%，接下来是C，占……%，最后是D、E、F，分别占……%……%……%。话题一：中学生的兴趣爱好

Spare

time,

hobby,

entertainment,

be

interested

in,

have

special

favor

to,

be

fond

of,

be

keen

on,

have

a

taste

in,

read

novels,

surf

the

Internet,

chat

online,

collect

stamps,

doing

sports,

develop

an

interest

in,

play

musical

instrument话题二：中学生健康

Physical

health,

mental

health,

overweight,slim,

thin,

loose

weight,

near\short

sighted,

energetic,

be

on

diet,

keep

healthy,

build

up

one’s

body,

take

regular

exercise,

good

living

habit,

get

into

the

habit

of,

nutrition,

nutritious,

eat

snacks,

skip

breakfast,

lose

appetite,

catch

cold\flu,

suffer

from

serious

disease,

pass

out,

runny

nose,

toothache,

dentist,

homesick,

depressed,

stay

up

all

night,

relaxation,

reduce

pressure话题三：劳动、求职与就业

offer

service

to,

heart

and

soul(一心一意）,

physical

labor,

mental

labor,

honorable（光荣的）,

earn

pocket

money,part-timejob,full-timejob，enlarge

one’s

knowledge,

get

working

experience,

apply

for,

major

in,

graduate

from,

degree,

scholarship,

be

skilled

in,

confident,

experienced,

perform

well

in

school,

leadership,

communicative,

cooperative,

competitive,

diligent话题四：校园文明与安全

School

rules

and

regulations,

obey,

be

neatly

dressed（衣着整洁）,

respect

one’s

teachers

and

parents,

be

on

time,

keep

the

environment

clean,

break

the

rules,

spit,litter,

cheat

in

exam,

get

in

line（排队）,

punish

sb.

for,

it’s

shameful

to,

library

card,

student

ID,

permit,

be

absent

from,话题五：友谊

Make

friends

with,

friendship,

friendly,

trust

each

other,

honesty,

knowledgeable,

standard,

precious,

be

loyal

to,

keep

in

touch

with,

keep

company

with

sb,

have

a

lot

in

common,

share

happiness

and

bitterness

with

each

other,

treasure,

good-tempered，A

friend

is

a

present

which

you

give

yourself.

A

life

without

a

friend

is

a

life

without

a

sun.话题六：环境保护

Pollution,

protect

the

environment,

give

off

a

bad

smell,

send

out

smoke

and

poisonous

gases

into

the

air,

pour

waste

water

into

the

river,

cut

down

trees,

throw

litter,

sandstorm,

global

warming,

Green

House

Effect,

live

in

harmony

with,

take

proper

measures

to,

improve

the

environment,

pose

a

great

threat

to,

die

out,be

endangered,

become

extinct,

species,

be

from

bad

to

worse,

Spring

up

like

mushrooms,

flood

into记住下列模板模板1：一般信件Dear________，Iarrivedsafelybackin________.Thanksagainforallyourhelpandkindnessduringmystayin________.YoureallymadesureIhadasafeandenjoyabletime.Ihopeyouarewellandeverythingisfinewithyou.Unfortunately,Ihaveaverysmallfavortoask.________(事情描述).________(必须做的原因).Iwonderifyouwouldmind________.Ofcourse,Iwillhappily________(你的回报).________(事情应怎样做).Thanksinadvance.Yours,LiHua模板2：求职信Dear________，Ihavelearntfromyesterday’snewspaperthatyouareemployinga/an________.Iwishtobeconsideredasanapplicantfortheposition,andbegtostatemyqualificationsasfollows:Iam________yearsold,aseniorstudentof________performanceandhavebeenawardedfirstclassscholarshipeachyear.Inadditiontomyeducationalbackground,Ihavetherichworkexperienceinthefieldsof________.Therefore,IbelieveIcanbeofvaluetoyourcompany.Enclosedismyresumeforyourreference,andIshallbegladtocallatyourofficeifyoudesireaninterview.Thankyou.Yourssincerely,LiHua模板3：观点对比Thetopicabout________isbecomingincreasinglypopularinourschool.Therearetwosidesofopinionaboutit.Somestudentsprefertoconsider________(做某事).Somestudentssay________istheirfavorite.Theythinkthat________(理由一).What’smore,________(理由二).Moreover,________(理由三).However,othersbelieve________isabetterchoiceforthreereasons.Tobeginwith,________(理由一).Next,________(理由二).Inaddition,________(理由三).Frommypointofview,theformerissurelyawisechoice.Thereasonisthat________(AsfarasIamconcerned,Ifirmlysupporttheviewthat________.)模板4：解决方法题型Inrecentdays,wehavetofaceaseriousproblemthat________.First,________(说明问题的现状)．Second,________(举例进一步说明现状).Confrontedwiththeproblem,weshouldtakeaseriesofeffectivemeasurestocopewiththesituation.Foronething,______(解决方法一).Foranother,______(解决方法二).Finally,______(解决方法三).Personally,Ibelievethat________(我的解决方法).Consequently,I’mconfidentthatabrightfutureisawaitingusbecause________(带来的好处)．模板5：说明利弊题型Nowadaysmanypeopleprefer_______(某事物)becauseithasasignificantroleinourdailylife.Generally,itsadvantagescanbeseenasfollows.First______(优点之一).Besides,______(优点之二).Buteverycoinhastwosides.Thenegativeaspectsarealsoapparent.Oneoftheimportantdisadvantagesisthat________(缺点一)．Tomakemattersworse,________(缺点二).Throughtheaboveanalysis,Ibelievethatthepositiveaspectsoverweighthenegativeones.Therefore,Iwouldliketo________(我的看法)．模板6：图表作文Asisshownbythefigureinthetable,________hasbeenontherise/decrease.Fromthesharprise/declineinthechart,itgoeswithoutsayingthat________.Thereareatleasttwogoodreasonsaccountingfor________.Ontheonehand,________.Ontheotherhand,________duetothefactthat________.Inaddition,________isresponsiblefor________.Maybetherearesomeotherreasonstoshow________.Butitisgenerallybelievedthattheabovementionedreasonsarecommonlyconvincing.AsfarasIamconcerned,Iholdthepointofviewthat________.Iamsuremyopinionisbothsoundandwell-grounded.模板7：话题作文Nowadays,therearemoreandmore________in________.Itisestimatedthat________.Whyhavetherebeensomany________？Maybethereasonscanbelistedasfollows.Thefirstreasonisthat________.Besides,________.Thethirdoneisthat________.Tosumup,themaincauseofitisdueto________.Itishightimethatsomethinghadtobedoneaboutit.Foronething,______.Foranother,_______.Allthesemeasureswillcertainlyreducethenumberof________.1.

涌入

flood

into

2.

雨后春笋般涌现

spring

up

3.

呈现出新面貌

take

on

a

new

look

4.

实现梦想

realize

one’s

dream

5.

被欺骗

be

taken

in

6.

阻止

prevent

from

7.

实现人生价值

achieve

the

worth

of

one’s

life

8.

名胜古迹

places

of

interest

9.

国内外知名

be

famous

at

home

and

abroad

10.浪费时间的

time-consuming

11.

充实自我

enrich

oneself

12.

致力于

devote

to

13.

感激

be

grateful

for

14.

精心打扮

be

dressed

up

15.

赞美

speak

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of翻译下列句子1．不用说早睡早起是值得的。_________________________________________________________________________2．我深信预防胜于治疗。_________________________________________________________________________3．在各种运动中，我尤其喜欢慢跑。_________________________________________________________________________4．时间最珍贵是很容易证明的。_________________________________________________________________________5．就我所知，下列方法对我帮助很大。_________________________________________________________________________6．毫无疑问，近视在我国的年轻人中是一个严重的问题。_________________________________________________________________________7．根据我个人经验，微笑已带给我许多好处。_________________________________________________________________________8．在我的求学过程中，我忘不了学习英文所遇到的大困难。_________________________________________________________________________9．随着台湾经济的快速发展，许多社会问题产生了。_________________________________________________________________________10．在这信息的年代，计算机扮演非常重要的角色。_________________________________________________________________________11．世上没有什么比到快餐店吃汉堡更令我高兴的。_________________________________________________________________________12．我们保持公共场所清洁是应当的。_________________________________________________________________________13．每当我想到我家附近那一条清澈的小溪，我就忍不住感到悲伤。_________________________________________________________________________14．一般相信阅读增加我们的知识、扩大我们的心胸。_________________________________________________________________________15．青少年犯罪的主要理由是社会环境日益败坏。_________________________________________________________________________16．俗话说得好：诚实为上策。_________________________________________________________________________17．人们学外语有三个理由。_________________________________________________________________________18．为了维护健康，我们每天至少可做三件事。_________________________________________________________________________19．我们生活需要有规律。也就是说，早睡早起，戒除烟酒。_________________________________________________________________________20．基于这个理由，我已决定把行医作为未来的职业。_________________________________________________________________________21．事实上，健康才是最重要的。_________________________________________________________________________22．此外，我们不应忽视每个人都想要一个温馨祥和的社会。_________________________________________________________________________23．相反，少数学生似乎还在鬼混。_________________________________________________________________________24．政府应严格执法，另一方面，大众也应该培养减少污染的好习惯。_________________________________________________________________________25．换言之，我会尽最大的努力完成我的目标。_________________________________________________________________________26．从此之后，我已发现微笑是日常生活中避免冲突的最好办法。_________________________________________________________________________27．更严重的是，我们不珍惜野生动物。_________________________________________________________________________28．做这些简单之事，我们一定可以快乐出门平安回家。_________________________________________________________________________29．唯有通力合作，我们才能期望台湾不久有新的面貌。_________________________________________________________________________30．最后，但并非最不重要，教育上的缺失是助长青少年犯罪的原因。_________________________________________________________________________31．总而言之，好国民应该遵守交通规则。_________________________________________________________________________32．因此，我们能下个结论，那就是世上自由最珍贵。_________________________________________________________________________33．如果我们能做到如上所述，毫无疑问，我们就能精通英语。_________________________________________________________________________35．中国在世界上人口最多，占到了20%，其次是印度，占到17%。_________________________________________________________________________34．根据一项调查，中国学生半数以上患有近视，位居世界第一。_________________________________________________________________________二快速升格你的作文使用高级词汇常用到的高级词汇例如：“此外”：addition,furthermore“同样地”inthesameway→likewise,similarly,equally,incomparison“然而”however→incontrast,ontheotherhand,onthecontrary“因为”becauseof→dueto,owingto,onaccountof,thanksto,asaresultof“虽然”though/although→despitethefactthat,inspiteofthefactthat“总之”inaword/inshort/allinall→inbrief,insummary,tosumup,tosummarize,toconclude“现今”today/now→nowadays,currently“同时”should→besupposedto“有时候”sometimes→occasionally又如：beinterestedin→becrazyabout;beabsorbedin;verygood→perfectlygood;mostof...→themajorityof...bemadeupof→consistof;as/solongas→onconditionthat;tryone’sbesttodo...→sparenoefforttodo...;growfast→growrapidly/growamazinglyfast再如：SuddenlyIhadanideathatsomeonehadbrokenintomyhouse.→AnideaoccurredtomethatsomeonehadbrokenintomyhouseThankyouverymuchforyouhelp.→Weappreciateyourhelpverymuch.PlentyofmemoryworkisundoubtedlyhelpfultoEnglishstudy.→PlentyofmemoryworkwillundoubtedlycontributetoEnglishstudy.2.用短语代替单词例如：Asaresult,theplanwas/turnedouttobeafailure.ShewenttoAustriatostudy/forthepurposeofstudyingmusic.Becausetheweatherwasgood/Thankstothegoodweather,ourjourneywascomfortable.Shecan’tcorrectlypronounce/hastroublepronouncingtheword.使用复杂结构1.改变语态Peoplesuggestthattheconferencebeputoff.(一般)Itissuggestedthattheconferencebeputoff.(高级)2.使用不定式Heissokindthathecanhelpme.(一般)Heissokindastohelpme.(高级)3.使用过去分词Shewalkedoutofthelabandmanystudentsfollowedher.(一般)Followedbymanystudents,shewalkedoutofthelab.(高级)4.使用V­ing形式Whenhearrives,pleasegivemeane­mail.(一般)Onarriving/hisarrival,pleasegivemeane­mail.(高级)5.使用名词性从句Itdisappointedeverybodythathedidn’tturnup.(一般)Thefactthathedidn’tturnupdisappointedeverybody.(高级)6.使用定语从句Thegirlisspokenhighlyof.Hercompositionwaswellwritten.(一般)Thegirlwhosecompositionwaswellwrittenisspokenhighlyof.(高级)7.使用强调句、倒装句、感叹句①Regularradiobroadcastsbeganin1920.(一般)Itwasnotuntil1920thatregularradiobroadcastsbegan.(高级)②ThoughI’mweak,Iwillmaketheeffort.(一般)WeakasIam,I’llmaketheeffort.(高级)③Weweregladtoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell.(一般)Howgladweweretoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell!(高级)添加过渡语1.表示时间、顺序关系的过渡语foronething,foranother,shortlyafterwards,afterthat,firstly,secondly...,then,next,finally,eventually,intheend2.表示递进、强调关系的过渡语besides,furthermore,what’smore,inaddition,moreover,worsestill,tomakemattersworse,indeed,certainly,surely,aboveall,aswell3.表示转折关系的过渡语but,yet,however,nevertheless,inspiteof,otherwise,while,afterall4.表示对比关系的过渡语onthecontrary,insteadof,ononehand...ontheotherhand,justlike,unlike,inthesameway,atthesametime,meanwhile5.表示解释、说明关系的过渡语namely(也就是),actually,suchas,forexample,forinstance,thatistosay,inotherwords,andsoon,totellyouthetruth,accordingtothis使用套语1.陈述原因1)Therearethreereasonsforthis.2)Thereasonsforthisareasfollows.3)Therearethreereasonsthataccountforthisphenomenon.例如：Therearethreereasonsforthechangesthathavetakenplaceinourlife.Firstly，people’slivingstandardhasbeengreatlyimproved.Secondly，mostpeoplearewellpaid,andtheycanaffordwhattheyneedorlike.Lastbutnotleast，moreandmorepeopleprefertoenjoymodernlife.2.陈述重要性、必要性、可能性或困难1)Itisimportant(necessary，difficult，convenient,possible)forsb.todosth.2)Wethinkitnecessarytodosth.3)Itplaysanimportantroleinourlife.例如：Computersarenowbeingusedeverywhere，whetherinthegovernment，inschoolsorinbusiness.Soon,computerswillbefoundineveryhome，too.WehavegoodreasontosaythatcomputersareplayinganincreasinglyimportantroleinourlifeandwehavesteppedintotheComputerAge.3.陈述变化1)Somechangeshavetakenplaceinthepastfiveyears.2)Agreatchangewillcertainlybeproducedintheworld’scommunications.3)Thecomputerhasbroughtaboutmanychangesineducation.例如：Somechangeshavetakenplaceinpeople’sdietinthepastfiveyears.Themajorreasonsforthesechangesarenotfartoseek.Nowadays，moreandmorepeopleareswitchingfromgraintomeatforprotein，andfromfruitandvegetabletomilkforvitamins.4.提出方法措施1)Weshouldtakesomeeffectivemeasures.2)Weshouldtryourbesttoovercome(conquer)thedifficulties.3)Weshoulddoourutmostindoingsth.4)Weshouldsolvetheproblemsthatweareconfronted(faced)with.例如：Thehousingproblemthatweareconfrontedwithisbecomingmoreandmoreserious.Thereforewemusttakesomeeffectivemeasurestosolveit.5.进行比较1)ComparedwithA，B...2)IprefertoreadratherthanwatchTV.3)Thereisastrikingcontrastbetweenthem.例如：Comparedwithcars，bicycleshaveseveraladvantagesbesidesbeingaffordable.Firstly，theydonotconsumenaturalresourcesofpetroleum.Secondly，theydonotcausethepollutionproblem.Lastbutnotleast，theycontributetopeople’shealthbygivingthemduephysicalexercise.使用谚语1.Thetruevalueoflifeisnotinwhatwegetbutinwhatwegive.人生的价值不在于索取，而在于奉献。2.Lifeisnotallroses.人生并非处处鸟语花香。3.Ifwintercomes,canspringbefarbehind？冬天来了，春天还会远吗？4.AllroadsleadtoRome.条条道路通罗马。5.Itisnevertoolatetomend.亡羊补牢，为时未晚。6.Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.有志者事竟成。7.Rome8.Failureisthemotherofsuccess.失败是成功之母。9.Wellbegunishalfdone.良好的开端是成功的一半。10.Strikewhiletheironishot.趁热打铁。11.Helaughsbestwholaughslast.笑在最后，笑得最好。12.Practicemakesperfect.熟能生巧。13.Afriendinneedisafriendindeed.患难见真交。14.Actionsspeaklouderthanwords.事实胜于雄辩。15.Allthatglittersisnotgold.发光的未必都是金子。16.Amanisknownbythecompanyhekeeps.观其交友，知其为人。17.AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.只工作不玩耍，聪明的孩子也变傻。18.Easiersaidthandone.说来容易做时难。19.It’snevertoolatetolearn.活到老，学到老。20.Opportunityknocksatthedooronlyonce.机不可失，时不再来。满分作文欣赏1作文题目：美国中学生Jeff将要来你所在的红星中学学习中文，经协商安排住在你家。假设你是李华，请给Jeff写一封信，按照下图顺序介绍他来中国后的生活安排。注意：词数不少于120。满分作文：MynameisLiHuaandIamwritingtointroducemyselftoyouandletyouknowmoreaboutyourupcomingstayinChina.MyfamilyandIareveryexcitedtohaveyoucometostaywithus!IamastudentatHongxingMiddleSchoolstudying.WewillbeabletorideourbikestoschooltogethereverydayandIcanintroduceyoutomanyactivitiesavailableoncampussuchasping­pong,basketballandsoccer.There’salargedininghalloncampusforlunch.ThemealsthereareverydeliciousandagoodintroductiontoChinesefood.Atourhouse,youwillhaveyourownbedroomandbathroom.Mymomanddadhopeyouwillhaveacomfortablestayhere.Anideaoccurredtomethatsomeonehadbrokenintomyhouse.WelookforwardtowelcomingyoutoChinaandourhome.Pleaseletmeknowifyouwouldliketoknowanythingelsebeforeyouarrive. Kindregards,LiHua亮点分析：文章涵盖了四幅图画的所有内容要点，使用了较复杂的语法结构和较高级的词汇，没有任何语法错误。段落划分合理，内容条理，结构紧凑。语言地道，如upcomingstay,cometostaywithus,manyactivitiesavailable,agoodintroductionto等。复杂语法结构，如whereyouwillalsobestudying,lookforwardtowelcomingyoutoChina等。2作文题目：假设你是新华中学的学生李华，得知某英文报招聘兼职记者，你有意应聘，请按下列要点给报社写一封自荐信。表示感兴趣说明优势：知识面、英语水平、合作精神、相关经历希望得到回复注意：词数不少于120。满分作文：DearSirorMadam,IamintheninthgradeatXinhuateachertoldmethatyourmagazineislookingforpart­timereporters.IbelieveIhavetherightskillsandenoughmotivationtotakeonthejob.IworkedasavolunteerattheCommonWealthGamesinAustralialastspring.Therefore,IhadexperienceofworkinginEnglishandinteractingwithpeoplewithdifferentbackgrounds.Infact,Imadefriendswithpeopleworldwide.Ialsohadachancetopracticeteamabilities.WhenIcamebacktoChina,Iwroteafront­pagestoryaboutmytripforourschoolnewspaper.Istandoutamongmypeersbykeepingastronginterestinlearningthingsbeyondmytextbooks.Byreadingnewspapersdaily,Iamabletofollowtheimportanteventsanddiscussthemwithparentsorclassmates.IwouldbeveryhappytoshowyoumypublishedstoryifIhaveanopportunityforaninterview.Thankyouforyourtime!Sincerely,LiHua亮点分析：文章涵盖了所有要点，内容充实，表达条理，有层次感。语言使用准确地道，还使用了therefore,infact,also等过渡语。句子结构复杂多变，词汇丰富，如enoughmotivationtotakeonthejob,madefriendswithpeopleworldwide,standout,byreadingnewspapersdaily,opportunityforaninterview等。3作文题目：暑假即将来临。你班同学讨论了假期计划，提出了不同看法，请根据提示写一篇有关讨论的英语短文，并谈谈你的看法。

优点缺点呆在家中花费少、舒适方便不能亲身了解外界外出旅游增长知识、开阔眼界花费多、旅途不便注意：词数不少于120。满分作文：Yesterday,ourclasshadadiscussionaboutoursummerholidayplans.Theclasswassplitbetweenthestudentsthatwouldstayathomeandthestudentswhoprefertravel.Thestudentsthatplantostayathomewanttosavemoney.Theyknowthathomeismorecomfortablebecausetheirparentswilllookafterthem.Ontheotherhand,theydon’tgetachancetoexploretheoutsideworld.Theotherstudentsarekeentotraveleventhoughitwillbeexpensive.Theyrealizetheywillmeetdifficulties,buttheybelievetheexperiencewillexpandtheirviewoftheworld.Inmyopinion,itisbettertoexpandourhorizonsthroughtravelwhileweareyoungandourparentscanaffordit.亮点分析：内容全面，涵盖了所有要点，表达条理清楚。使用了较多句式结构，如定语从句，状语从句，宾语从句等。过渡语的使用，如ontheotherhand,but,inmyopinion，也给文章增色不少。词汇也很丰富，如prefertravel,exploretheoutsideworld,keen,expand等。学生习作评析1作文题目：假定你是李华，从小喜爱大熊猫(panda)，一直通过有关网站(website)关注三年前在美国圣迭哥动物园出生的大熊猫“苏琳”和她的母亲“白云”。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园工作人员写一封不少于120词的短信。1.自我介绍；2.祝贺苏琳生日；3.感谢工作人员；4.索取苏琳三岁生日照。学生习作DearSir/Madam,GreetingsfromChina!IamahighschoolstudentfromNo.1middleschool1.Iwrite2thislettertocelebrateSulin’sthree3birthday.Ilove4pandassinceIwasachild.Ihavebeentaking5attentiontoSulinandBaiyunforthreeyears.6Thankyoufortakingcareofthem.Ithinkyoumayfeeltiredbutalsofeelveryinterested7,right?IalwaysdreamthatifIwereyou,Iwouldbecomeahappiness8girl.Finally,IhopethatIcangetaSulin’sthree9birthdayphoto.Couldyougiveittome?Ilookforwardtohearingfromyousoon.Yourstruly,LiHua教师批改1.如加上该校所在的省份，信息就显得更真实。“middleschool”的首字母要大写。2．正确的时态是现在进行时“amwriting”。3．“三岁生日”应是“three­year­oldbirthday”或“thirdbirthday”。4．since短语应与现在完成时连用。5．要改用payingattentionto。6．缺少过渡语。7．用“althoughyouaretired,youarealsoverypleased,right？”更好。8．happiness要改用happy。9．three改为third。点评：文章涵盖了题目中给出的大部分要点内容，遗憾之处是漏掉了一个次重点内容，即“通过有关网站关注三年前在美国圣迭哥动物园出生的大熊猫”。作者在行文中使用了复杂句型，用到了时间状语从句(IlovepandassinceIwasachild)、宾语从句(Ithinkyoumayfeeltiredbut...)和虚拟语气(IfIwereyou,Iwouldbecomeahappinessgirl)等，不足之处是文章个别地方过渡得不够自然，略显突兀，而且行文中多处出现了语法和词汇的错误。经典范文DearSir/Madam,GreetingsfromChina!ThisisLiHua,ahighschoolstudent1fromNo.1MiddleSchool,JilinProvince.Ihavebeenapandalover2sinceIwasalittlechild.Threeyearsago,Sulin,thedaughter3ofBaiyun,wasborninyourzoo.Sincethen,Ihavebeenwatching4Sulin’sgrowthfromyourwebsite,andIamverydelightedtolearnthatSulinandhermotherarelivinghappilyinAmerica.Iamconvinced5thatyoumusthaveputalotofeffortsin6takingcareofthem.Thankyouverymuch!Now,Sulinisgoingtobethreeyearsold,andIwishherahappybirthday.Ifpossible7,IhopethatIcangetaphotoofSulintaken8onherthree­year­oldbirthdayparty.Wishyouahappydayandlookingforwardtohearingfromyousoon.Yourstruly,LiHua亮点提取1.同位语，使句子结构复杂了。2．比havebeenlovingpandas更地道。3．插入语，能丰富写作时的名型。4．现在完成进行时态用得恰到好处。5．Iamcon