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2024年1月浙江高考读后续写Eva
spentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasa
sixstorybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers'offices.Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.Havingapoorsenseof
direction,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonemittomemory.Shedecidedthatshewould
memorize
whereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn'texist.InherfirstPEclass,Evawasshockedwhen
coachPitt
announcedthateveryonehadtorun
onemile
aroundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,"amile"wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfather's,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle(哨子),Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind."It'sjustthebeginning,"shethought."I'lleinlastforsure."SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusinga
mindtrick
onherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword"mile."Instead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadowcastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thenshe
concentrated
onjoggingtothespotwherethetrackcurved(拐弯).Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldpleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,thenfour.Paragraph1:WhencoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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文本故事梗概中学生活第一周,Eva同学正在努力适应新环境,时常迷失在纵横交错的教学楼走廊中。体育课上,Pitt教练要求学生在操场上跑完一英里。这项任务让Eva感到惊慌,因为对她而言,一英里是很长的距离。面对困境,她用心理战术(mindtrick)鼓励自己,通过关注操场上一棵橡树的树影来转移注意力。同时,Eva将一英里的挑战细分成若干个小圈,每个小圈都是她能够掌控的小目标。这种方法奏效了。在她全神贯注地逐个击破这些小目标时,四圈早已悄然完成,终点就在眼前…
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续写策略建议很容易看出,原文中的主要人物是新生Eva。体育老师Pitt则是次要人物。第一段续写的重点应该放在Eva跑完1英里之后的内心感受描写上。当然,从给出的首句“Nicework!”可以看出,Pitt应当和Eva有一定的语言和动作上的互动。续写的难点在第二段,也就是具体Eva如何把这种mindtrick运用到识记错综复杂的6层教学楼当中。这段续写想要做到合理,写作必须紧密联系Eva在跑一英里过程中所使用的mindtrick的核心:拆分任务(divideandconquer)化整为零(breakdownthewholeintoparts).写作示范WhencoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.
Shehadexpectedtobethelastonetofinish,butthereshewas,receivingpraisefromthe
coach.Gaspingforair,withsweatdrippingdownherface,sherealizedshehadacplishedsomethingshethoughtwasimpossible.Thesenseofachievementwasoverwhelming.Asshestoodthere,catchingherbreath,Evareflectedonherjourneyaroundthetrack.Itwasn'tjustaboutpleting
onemile,itwasaboutoveringherfearandpushingpastherperceivedlimitations.Thisexperiencewasapowerfulreminderthatshecouldachievemorethanshehadevergivenherselfcreditfor.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.
Justlikeshehad
concentrated
onsmall,achievablegoalsduringher
onemile
run,shebegantobreakdowntheschoolmapintosmaller,manageablesections.Insteadoftryingto
memorize
theentirelayoutatonce,shestartedbyfamiliarizingherselfwiththeareasaroundherclassrooms.Gradually,herunderstandingofthe
sixstorybuilding
grew.Daybyday,themazeofhallwaysandroomsbecamelessintimidating.Evalearnedthat,whetheronthetrackorinthecorridorsofherschool,takingthingsonestepatatimewasthekeytooveringherfearsandchallenges.默写版:WhencoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.
Shehadexpectedtobethelastonetofinish,_______________________但她在那里,受到了教练的赞扬._____________________________________________________她喘着粗气,汗水顺着脸往下滴,意识到自己完成了一些她认为不可能完成的事情.Thesenseofachievementwasoverwhelming.Asshestoodthere,____________________________________________________________伊娃喘着粗气,回忆起她绕跑道的旅程.Itwasn'tjustaboutpleting
onemile,itwasaboutoveringherfearandpushingpastherperceivedlimitations.___________________________________________________这段经历有力地提醒我们,她可以取得比以往任何时候都更大的成就.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.
Justlikeshehad
concentrated
onsmall,achievablegoalsduringher
onemile
run,______________________________________________________________她开始把学校地图分解成更小、易于管理的部分.Insteadoftryingto
memorize
theentirelayoutatonce,shestartedbyfamiliarizingherselfwiththeareasaroundherclassrooms.Gradually,herunderstandingofthe
sixstorybuilding
grew.___________________________________________________________________一天比一天,迷宫般的走廊和房间变得不那么吓人了。Evalearnedthat,________________________________________________________________无论是在跑道上还是在学校的走廊里,一步一个脚印是克服恐惧和挑战的关键.01写作细节分析WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.
Shehadexpectedtobethelastonetofinish,butthereshewas,receivingpraisefromthe
coach.(必要的主要人物和次要人物之间的互动)Gaspingforair,withsweatdrippingdownherface,sherealizedshehadacplishedsomethingshethoughtwasimpossible.(合理的细节描写:Eva不擅长跑步,跑完后大汗淋漓、气喘吁吁)Thesenseofachievementwasoverwhelming.(合理的情感描写:获得了成就感)Asshestoodthere,catchingherbreath,Evareflectedonherjourneyaroundthetrack.Itwasn'tjustaboutpleting
onemile,itwasaboutoveringherfearandpushingpastherperceivedlimitations.(反思跑步成功的原因,为下文找到记忆错综复杂的教学楼做铺垫)
Thisexperiencewasapowerfulreminderthatshecouldachievemorethanshehadevergivenherselfcreditfor.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.
Justlikeshehad
concentrated
onsmall,achievablegoalsduringher
onemile
run,shebegantobreakdowntheschoolmapintosmaller,manageablesections.(和原文高度互动:跑完一英里的关键是Eva专注于拆分后的若干小任务)Insteadoftryi
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