读后续写：水中救人讲义 2022届高考英语作文备考

模板:一、环境描写（恶劣）二、情绪描写（绝望、恐惧+挣扎）三、转机描写——描写声音传来或看见了什么四、情绪描写（希望+努力）五、脱险描写六、情绪描写（感恩+高兴）七、主旨描写一、环境描写（恶劣）自然环境描写——描写波涛汹涌Thecoastlinewashiddenbehindtheroaringwaves（汹涌澎湃的浪涛）withalmostnoonetobeseen.AsIfloatedon,ahugewave（—个巨浪）whistled（呼啸而来）andapproachedus.Thebigwindroaredthroughourears（在耳边咆哮），andwewerepushedawayfromtheshorefartherandfarther.Allmysensestoldmethatabigwavewasabouttocome.（即将来［指）Apowerful-looking（看似猛烈的）wavewascomingtowardsus.（靠近我们）Thefiercewavesshowednosignofdyingdown（没有消退的迹象）.Theseawas（汹涌的；风浪大的）thatdayanditwasdifficulttohandle（控制）thebodyboard.鲨鱼等：Agraytrianglefinstickingupthroughthewater,headingrightforher.Itwasashark,amassivesharkthatwasswimmingaround,notfarawayfromher.Theshark'sjawsopenedwide,showingrowsofrazor-sharpteeth.陆地上：Assplashingraindropshitthewindshieldfranticallyandtheskieswereoverhungwithablanketofgrey,Icouldbarelymakeoutthefigureinthetruck.雨滴疯狂地打在挡风玻璃上，天空笼罩在一片灰色之中，我几乎看不清卡车里的人影。Thewaterkeptrising,asifitwouldengulfmealive.水不停地涨，仿佛要把我活吞下去。Unfortunately,thewaterpouredinandcreptuponmywaist.在水里行走（不可能rush,dash）wade:跋涉，踵（水或淤泥等）Joele叩edoutandwadedintotheflood.struggle:艰难地行进；吃力地进行Istruggledupthehillwiththeheavybags.struggletoone，sfeet挣扎着站起来plod:艰难地行走；吃力地Ourhorsesploddeddownthemuddytrack.我们的马沿着泥泞小路蹒跚而行。Weploddedonthroughtherain.我们冒雨艰难地跋涉。stagger/totter/stumble蹒跚；踉跄Withjawsclenched,Iresolvedtokeepedgingcloser,inchbyinch.Musteringupmycourage,Ipushedthedooropenwithallmymight,seizedJoe'sarmtightly,andwewaddled（蹒跚而行）tothetruckbyholdingeachotherup.Istretchedoutmyarmstoembracehim,andhepattedmeonthebackslightlytoshowcomfort.hoperekindled..（如彳可获救）Theythrewaropeatmycar,pullingittowardsthesafeplace..Luckily,itdidn'ttakelongbeforemycarwasoutofdanger..（获救后的动作和想法）Therainpouringandthewindroaring,IdashedtoJoeandhuggedhimtightly..（照应主旨）OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasJoewhohadbeencaringformethroughthickandthin.下水文2:Lookingovermyshoulder,Istaredintotheflashinglightsofatruck.Peekingthroughthemountingrain,Istruggledtomakeoutthevaguefigureoverthere.ItwasJoethatshoutedandwavedviolently."Joe,Tmhere!,,Iwounddownthewindow,tearsofhorrormixedwithrainstreamingdownmyface.Mycarbegantoshakeincreasinglywildly.Picturingtheroadcrackedandthecarwasfloodedaway,Ifeltmorefrightenedandsenseddeathwaswaitingfbrme."Jumpoutofthecarandrantome!^^Joeyelledandgotoffthetruck,waitingformyaction.IscreamedthatIcouldn'tmakeit.Yellingatthetopofhisking,Joetriedtosoothemeandconvincemethatitwasthebestwaytoescapethedanger.Iopenedthedoorandreachedoutmyfoot,tryingtofindaproperlandpoint.Afterconfirmingthesafety,Iinchedforwardinthemuddywaterandeventuallyrushedfranticallytowardsmyhusband.Joealsoraninmydirection,gatheredmeintohisarmsandkeptpattingmyback.Sabbinqinrelief,Iwasoverwhelmedbywavesofquiltandremorse.Imurmuredsorry,reflectingthatIshouldhavetakenhiswarningseriously.下水文3：Lookingovermyshoulder,Istaredintotheflashinglightsofatruck.HardlyhadIrealizedthatsomeonewouldrescuemewhenmyonceviolentlybumpedheartsank.Icouldseethedrivergetoffthetruckandstumbledtowardsmewiththeheavyrainpouringdown.Meanwhile,theroaringwaterseemedtoengulfmethenextsecond,sothefrightthathadbeensubmergedinmyheartsuddenlyresurfaced."Openthedoor!,,IwasshockedtoheartheshoutofJoeandrealizedwhothewarm-heartedstrangerwas.Hiswordsreignitedtheflameofhopeinmyheart,butIwasstilldreadofthefloodoutside.IscreamedthatIcouldn'tmakeit."Believeinme,youcandoit!”Hisdeterminedvoicespreadacrosstheheavyrainandechoedinmyhead.Drivenbyhisencourapement,Istruggledtopushthedoorwithmyfullstrengthandsubmergedbytherapidcurrent.WhenIwasabouttobecarriedawaybythewater,Joegrabbedmyhandanddraggedmetothesafeplace.Wewerebothsoakedtotheskin.Lookingintohisdeepblueeyes,Iburstintotears,tearsofremorse.Actually,itwasthemanrightinfrontofmewhounderstoodhowtotakegoodcareofme.下水文4:Lookingovermyshoulder,Istaredintotheflashinglightsofatruck.Littlebylittle,thelightsseemedtodim.Off口otaman.UponrecocnizinqthemanwasJoe,Icouldn'thelprestrainingmyexcitement."Honey,don'tbefrightened!Fmthrowingathickrope,withwhichyoucangetoutofthedilemma.nHeshoutedaffectionately.Ididasheinstructed,openingthedoor,slippinginthewaterandwalkingstraighttowardhim,unafraidofsurgingwater.Everythingwasgoingwelluntilapowerful-lookingwaveapproachedme.Ilostmybalancebutseizedtheropetightly.Timepassing,tirednessengulfedmewithmyfeetstiffandshivering.IscreamedthatIcouldn'tmakeit.Mylipsquivered,bigtearsrollingdowncheeks.Confrontedwiththissituation,Joeconstantlycomfortedmetocalmdown.Actually,thetorrentwasindeedtemporary,soIgrittedoutmyteethandkeptmovingforwardslowlyandcautiously.TheinstantIgrabbedholdofhishand,Istruggletothrowmyselfathim.Joepattedmeandsiqhedingreatrelief.Iapologizedtohimformyfault,thenwegrinnedmerrilyateachother.PoorlyasJoeperformedindoinghousework,mysafetywasalwayshispriority.Thereareleestoeverywine,butrescuingmetoothandnailintheshortcutmakeshimmyperfecthusband.原题参考范文:Lookingovermyshoulder,Istaredintotheflashinglightsofatruck.ItwasJoe!Icouldn'thelpburstingintotears.Joeshoutedtomenottobefrightened.ThenhethrewathickropesothatIcouldhangontoitandwalkstraighttowardhim.Iopenedthedoor,grabbeditandinchedout.However,asuddenfallleftmeintherushingwater.Istruggledtomyfeet,onlytofindabranchblockingthewayrightinfrontofme.IscreamedthatIcouldn7makeit.Joe,however,remainedcalm!HeurgedmetotakeonestepatatimeandassuredmeIcouldmakeit.ImovedforwardslowlyandcautiouslybeforeIfellintohisarms.Sobbingaqsinsthischest,IapologizedthatIshouldn'thavetakentheshortcut.Joepattedmesayinghisprimaryconcernwasmysafety.OnlythendidIrealizeJaeactuallyunderstoodhowtotakecareofmedespitehistroublewiththehousework.Passage7水中自救Paragraph1:Allofasudden,Bettyfeltsomethingtouchingthebottomofherfoot.Paragraph2:"Help!Help!”Bettyscreamedinhorror..确定主题：水中遇险自救。.时空变化：时空变化不大，霎时之间发生的险情。.续写难点：具体的细节描写与心理活动。下水续写Paragraph1:Allofasudden,Bettyfeltsomethingtouchingthebottomofherfoot.JWhatwasthat?Shewondered.Aseafish?JBeforeshecouldgetonthesurfboard,itbumpedherinthefootonceagain.JShesuddenlyhadthefeelingthatanenormousfish,biggerthanher,wascirclingaroundher.JAchillfeelingcreptupherspineasshethoughtofthejokeUncleMarkplayedonher.AndthenBettysawit:agraytrianglefinstickingupthroughthewater,headingrightforher.JItwasashark,amassivesharkthatwasswimmingaround,notfarawayfromher.JForasplitsecond,herheartpracticallyskippedabeat.JParagraph2:"Help!Help!”Bettyscreamedinhorror.]Hearingtheterriblescreamforhelp,UncleMarkinstantlyrealizedthatsomethingbadwashappening.JWithoutthinking,heswamasquicklyashecouldtowardsBettyandyelled,"Getout!・・.”JButBettyseemedstuck,tooscaredtomove.JAttheverymoment,theshark'sjawsopenedwide,showingrowsofrazor-sharpteeth.]Withallhismight,UncleMarkstabbeditinthemouthwithhissurfboard,scaringthemonsteraway.AndthenhegrabbedholdofBetty'sarmanddraggedhertothebeach.Allthistookonlyafewminutes,butBettywouldneverforgetthefrighteningexperience.Paragraph1:Allofasudden,Bettyfeltsomethingtouchingthebottomofherfoot.Whatwasthat?Shewondered.Aseafish?Beforeshecouldgetonthesurfboard,itbumpedherinthefootonceagain.Shesuddenlyhadthefeelingthatanenormousfish,biggerthanher,wascirclingaroundher.AchillfeelingcreptupherspineasshethoughtofthejokeUncleMarkplayedonher.AndthenBettysawit:agraytrianglefinstickingupthroughthewater,headingrightforher.Itwasashark,amassivesharkthatwasswimmingaround,notfarawayfromher.Forasplitsecond,herheartpracticallyskippedabeat.Paragraph2:"Help!Help!”Bettyscreamedinhorror.Hearingtheterriblescreamfbrhelp,UncleMarkinstantlyrealizedthatsomethingbadwashappening.Withoutthinking,heswamasquicklyashecouldtowardsBettyandyelled,“Getout!ButBettyseemedstuck,tooscaredtomove.Attheverymoment,theshark'sjawsopenedwide,showingrowsofrazor-sharpteeth.Withallhismight,UncleMarkstabbeditinthemouthwithhissurfboard,scaringthemonsteraway.AndthenhegrabbedholdofBetty'sarmanddraggedhertothebeach.Allthistookonlyafewminutes,butBettywouldneverforgetthefrighteningexperience.Passage8暴雨中救人脱困Paragraph1:Atthatmoment,theyhadtotakeactionandgetout.Theyshoutedatthetopoftheirvoice,butnoonecouldhearthem.Theybegantoworryandwereconvincedtheyhadtostayintheirsnowmobilingbuddyforthenight.Suddenly,agoodideaoccurredtoKathy.Shetookoffoneofherclothesandburnedit.Seeingthefire,peopleranoverandmanagedtopullhercaroutwithalltheirefforts,makingCrisashamedforhisrefusaltoothers.Paragraph2:WhenKathyarrivedatherhome,hermotherwaswaitingforher.SheaskedKathywhathadhappened.Kathyexplained,"Imadeaterriblemistake.Butforothers'help,Icouldn'thavebeenhomefbrthenight.^^Whenaskedwhatshewoulddowhensomeonehaddifficulty,Kathyansweredimmediatelythatshewoulddoanythingtohelpothersbecausetoday'sexperienceturnedouttobeagreatlessonforher.Passage9漂筏遇险Ineverpicturedmyfamilyonawhitewaterrafting（漂筏）vacationinColorado.Wehadtriedraftingseveraltimesbeforewithinstructorsandguides.Allofuslikedit!Icomefromafamilyofexcellentathletes,andIsometimeshavetoworkhardatholdingmyown.Ididn'tevenmindwhenmysister,Marta,whoisfourteen,keptcorrectingmytechnique.Becauseshe'sthreeyearsolder,MartabelievesifshermissioninlifetomakesureIdoeverythingperfectly."Nina,holdyourpaddle（桨）thisway.Nina,plantyourfeetfirmly,“shecorrects.Honestly,sometimesshe'sfullofherself,althoughIguessshemeanswell.Thatmorning,Dadhadusgatherourequipment,aswehadlearned.Hethentookusthroughhischecklist.OnlyDadcouldreadhischecklistbecausehishandwritingwassohardtoread.“Paddles-check,helmets-check,lifejackets-check,buckets-checkjuntileverythingwasaccountedfor.ThenweboardedourrubberraftforourtripandheadeddownthebeautifulColoradoRiver.Momhadmappedoutourroute.Itfeltgreattopaddletogetherwitheveryoneelse.DadandIsatintherear（尾部）oftheraft.MomandMartasatinthefront.Fromtimetotime,wavesbeatagainstthesidesoftheraft,sprayingwaterinourfaces.Allofasudden,ourraftcametoacompletestop.“What'swrong?”Iasked,hopingIdidn'tsoundnearlyasanxiousasIffelt."Yikes!”exclaimedMom.“We'restuckonsomerocks!”"Maybeariverguidewillcomebyandhelp."suggestedMarta.However,therewasn!tasoulinsight.Shetriedshouting,“HELLO,OUTTHERE!^^Allweheardbackwasanecho.“Don'tworry.Iknowwhatwecando/9saidDad."Itisthefrontoftheraftthatisstuck,solet'sallsitintherear.Ourweightwillprobablygettheraftofftherocks."Cautiously,MomandMartamovedtotherear.Nothinghappened.注意：.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.续写局部分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Myheartsank.Nervousandanxious,Ibegantocomplainaboutwhathadhappened.“Comeon-where'syoursenseofadventure（冒险）？"DadandMomstrokedmyheadandkeptmecalm.However,mysister,Marta,whowassittingacross,gavemealonghardstarewithanairofaccusation（责备）andthenturnedtoaddress（对人说）meinanaggressivevoice,“Nina,Actyourage!It'snousecomplaining.Highontheagendaistofindawayout”Withtheseacid（亥I［薄的）remarks,sheadvisedthatallofusmovetothefrontoftherubberraft.Wemovedtothefrontcautiouslyassheinstructedus,butstillwithnosuccess.Afterthat,wemadeallvainattemptstogettheraftofftherocks,feelinginastateofabsolute（绝对的）terror/desperatelyhopeless.Paragraph2:SuddenlyIhitonanidea.Pointingtotheriver,Istartedshoutingwithexcitement.HDad,Dad...theriverisactuallyshallow.Whydon'twepushitofftherocks?"Father,absorbedinhisplan,lookedatthewaterwithdoubtandjumpeddown,noddingtomewithadmiration.Offtheboatwejumpedintothecoldwater,whichweaccommodatedtosoon,andpusheditwithgreatefforts.Afterwhatseemedages,wegotoutoftroubleandcontinuedthegreattripwithlotsoflaughs.WhatisworthmentioningisthatMartachangedherattitudetowardmeaftertheexperience.其它:Theyweregettingdrenchedbyicywater.他们被冰冷的水浇透了。Theheavyrainwasviolentlybeatingagainstthewindow.大雨疯狂地击打窗户oTheraindrummedontheroofofthebuilding.雨不停地击打着房预。AstormisCatherine.一场暴风雨正在酝酿之中cThefuriousstormiswrumblinwoutside.狂风暴雨在室外呼啸着。Thestormragedforseveralhours.猛烈的风暴持续了几个小时。Thewindblows/whistles/howls/picksup/whipsthroughsth/sweepsacrosssth.风刮/飕飕的刮/呼啸而过/愈刮愈大/刮过・・・・・・/掠过・・・・・・Theicywindstartedhowling,stinwinwmyface.寒风开始咆哮，刺痛了我的脸。Aflashofliehtninqlitupthewholesky.一道闪电点亮了整个天空。Thesharpdapsofthunderpiercedthequietnight.声声清脆的雷声划破了宁静的夜晚。Theblindinglightningflashedinthesky.天空中眩目的闪电闪亮。Theboltoflightningstabstheearth.一道闪电划过天空。Asitthunderedintosight,theroarofthewavewasdeafening.当它雷鸣般进入视线时，海浪的轰鸣声震耳欲聋。巨浪拍打海岸Ihugewaveslash/breakontheshore猛烈拍打Ithewavespound/crash/smashagainstthepier细浪拍击船舷Ismallwavesslapagainstthesideoftheboat波浪涌向海滩Iwavesroll/surgeontothebeach轰鸣|thesearoars/rumbles/thusders波涛汹涌Itheseaswells/chums天空和海洋融为一体Itheskyandtheoceanmeltintoeachother二、情绪描写（绝望、恐惧+挣扎）——描写疲倦/寒冷Drowninthesea,Ilostmybalance（失去了平衡）butseizedthebodyboardtightly.Timepassingus,tirednessengulfed（包围了）uswithmyfeetstiff'/numb（僵硬/麻木）andshivering.Exhaustedaswewere（尽管彳艮累）,wedidn'tstop.Grittingoutteeth,wekeptswimming.Afterwhatseemedacentury.IfeltextremelyfatiguedGE常累）whileswimminghardtokeepmyself叨。点（漂浮着的）.CastingalookatTom,Icouldtellhewasalsoapparentlyvvo”-。"/（明显地精疲力尽了）.Findersnumbedbythechillywater,throatchokedbyicywind,Ifeltontheverqeofcollapsing.SheclaspedthebabytoherbosominthebitinRcuttinQ/pierdng/sharpwind.在刺骨的寒风里，她把孩子紧紧地抱在胸前。Theicywindstartedhowling,cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife/needles.寒风开始咆哮，像锋利的小刀/针一样刺痛了我的脸。Herteethwerechatteringwithcold.她冷得牙齿直打颤。Hewashuddledintohiscoat,hisfacebluewithcold.他缩讲大衣里,冷得脸都发紫了。Saltstinging（刺痛）myeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.描写害怕1.1tookadeepbreathandswallowedhard（害怕地咽了口吐沫）.Watchingtheshoreinthedistance,Ifeltpowerless（无力的）asifwewerebrokentinyboatsatthemercyofstrong（simile）Exhaustedandcold,thethoughtthatwemightdiehereflashedacrossmymind,whichmademequiverwithanuncontrollable粗〃。/772。〃。为?欣/2,（难以控制地发抖）.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffearsurgingthroughmywhole力.（在身体涌动）Astimetickedby,fearcreptuponmy片（爬上我/（L'头）andIcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldplough（前行）.Thethoughtofhopelessnesssentshiversdownmys〃沅e（让我后脊背发凉）.Iwasfloodedwithasenseef（被恐惧感淹没）.Seeingthis,Ifeltmyfear且2卬"吆/7〃"6。5加米剧增）inside.9.1feltawaveofanxiety^一阵焦虑）sweptovermybody（袭来）.10.Achillfeelingcreptupherspine.其它恐慌：Tearsoffrustrationandhorrorgushingfrommyeyes,IfeltIhadsunkintohopelessness.Asenseofterrorsweepingthroughmybody,Ishoutedinpanic,"Help!Help!”Seizedbyastrongsenseoffright,Istruggledtoshove（猛推）thedooragain.ThehairsonthebackofmyneckprickledwithdreadandIwasdrenchedinsweat.C千毛彳到竖；湿透）Swallowedbyawaveofdespair,Icrossedmyfingers,closedmyeyesandprayedinashiveringvoice.Tremblinglikealeaf,thecarwasreadytobefloodedawayatanytime,whichrefrainedmefrommovingasingleinch.——描写挣扎努力Tomlookedthoughtful（假设有所思）"Weneedtothinkoutaway!”Imuttered（喃喃自语），scratchingmyhead（绞尽脑汁）...,Weswamtoothandnail（全力以赴地）.Wesparednoeffortto（不遗余力地）toswimtowardstheshore.Weexchangedadeterminedlook（互换了坚定的神情），thenploughedon（继续前行）atanincrediblespeed（难以置信的速度）.Theydozedoffandthenjerkedthemselvesawake.三、转机描写——描写声音传来或看见了什么Adistantsoundreachedour（传入耳朵）Asoft,忆66（似笛声的）soundfloatedacrossthesea（漂浮在海上）Thesoundoftheboatechoedinour在我们耳内回响）Atthatmoment,ashrillwhistle（汽笛声）rippedtheair（划破天空）.Whenwewereatalossofwhattodo,therewererasping（刺耳的）双喊叫声）risingfromthedistance（从远处升起）.Aship'shornsounded（喇叭声响起）.Insheerdesperation（在绝望中），Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthemheadingtowardsusinthedistance.Afteralongtime,alightspotappearedinthedistance!Wewavedourhandsandyelledoutforhelp.Jasonsawsomethingflickerinthedistance."Lights!Iseelights!”Jasonshoutedout.Justthen,mymindraced-whynotcall911andJoe?四、情绪描写（希望+努力）一描写如释重负Ensuringtheirsafety,Ifeltasurge.次次啊也（感到一阵胜利的喜悦）Hearingthecomfortingnews,Icouldnrthelprestrainingmyexc泥〃情难自抑）Itthrilledus（听到..彳艮高兴）tohearthegoodnews.Onhearingthegoodnews,TomandIsighedingreat2〃呢如释重负地叹了口气），grinningmerrilyateachother.Smilingin忆生/1（如释重负地微笑）,Ifeltarush（内mde（感到一阵自豪）.Ove/joyed（狂喜）toseeaboatcomingtoourrescue,TomandIbreathedasighqfc/（如释重负地松了口气）Stifffromkeepinginonepositionfor...hours,theyslowlyunfoldedtheirbodies.Asifclutchingatstraws,Idialedthenumberagainandagain.Hiswordsreignitedtheflameofhopeinmyheart五、脱险描写Theboatfinallyreachedusandtookallofusbacktotheshore.YeHingatthetopofhislung,Joetriedtosoothemeandconvincemethatitwasthebestwaytoescapethedanger.Withallhismight,hestabbeditinthemouthwithhissurfboard,scaringthemonsteraway.六、情绪描写（感恩+高兴）Whenwepicturedwhatthemerryscenewouldbe,relieflayinmyheartandhappinessetched/waswrittenonmyface.Sighinginrelief,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.Iknewtheywouldhavediediftheyhadbeenintheseaforanylonger.七、主旨描写Itoccurredtomethathelpingotherswaspricelessandeveryoneshouldbealifeguard.Forthefirsttimesince.・・,one'semotionsgotthebestofhimandtearstrickleddownhischeeks.OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasJoewhohadbeencaringformethroughthickandthin.Sobbinginrelief,Iwasoverwhelmedbywavesofguiltaedremorse.Imurmuredsorry,reflectingthatIshouldhavetakenhiswarningseriously.Allthistookonlyafewminutes,butBettywouldneverforgetthefrighteningexperience.Passage1风雨中助人Wehadtowait.场景一：Theicywindstartedhowling,stineingmyface.Theseawas（汹涌的；风浪大的）thatdayanditwasdifficulttohandle（控制）thebodyboard.Fingersnu/nbedbythechillywater,throatchokedbyicywind,Ifeltonthevergeofcollapsing.场景二：“Weneedtothinkoutaway!”IcastaencouragingeyeatMoisesandmuttered（□南口南自语）,scratchingmyhead（绞尽脑汁）Weexchangedadeterminedlook（互换了坚定的神情）,thenploughedon（继续前行）atanincrediblespeed（难以置信的速度）.场景三：Suddenly,Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthemheadingtowardsusinthedistance./outofnowhere,someboatswithlifeguardsonthemcameintoview二/Jasonsawsomethingflickerinthedistance."Lights!Iseelights!”Morisyelledatthetopofhislung.场景四：Insplitseconds,theboatsfinallyreachedusandtookallofusbacktotheshore.Thetwokidsweresenttothehospitalwithoutdelay.Paragraph2:Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwopeoplewereingoodcondition.场景五：感叹+虚拟Whenwepicturedwhatthemerryscenewouldbe,relieflayinmyheartandhappinessetched/waswrittenonmyface.Wecannotimaginewhatwouldhavehappenedbutforthetimelyappearanceoftheboats./Sighinginrelief,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.Iknewtheywouldhavediediftheyhadbeenintheseaforanylonger.Thedesperationstilllingeredinmyheartthatwithsaltstinging（刺痛）myeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.场景六：主旨点题Thenextmorning,allthepeopleImetsmiledtomeandcouldnotstoppraisingme.Itseemedlikeagoodopportunitytoshowmyselfoff,butIdidn'tmeanto.Infact,IwasashamedIhadthoughtaboutit.Itoccurredtomethathelpingotherswaspricelessandeveryoneshouldbealifeguard./ObviouslyIhaddoneabigdealwhichissurelyagoodopportunitytoshowoff.Ratherthanfeellikeahero,Ibelieveanyonewhocouldswimwouldhavedonethesamething.其它版本一：Wehadtowait.Weeagerlyhopingforthearrivalofthesavingboat.Thewildwindblewandthefreezingseawaterclappedourbodiescontinuously.30minutesseemedmuchlongeraswejusthelplesslyfloatedontheboundlesssea.Afteralongtime,alightspotappearedinthedistance!Wewavedourhandsandyelledoutforhelp.Theboatfinallyreachedusandtookallofusbacktotheshore.Thetwochildrenwereimmediatelysenttothenearesthospital.Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwopeoplewereingoodcondition.Picturingwhatthemerryscenewouldbe,relieflayinmyheartandhappinessetchedonmyface.Thenextmorning,allthepeopleImetsmiledtomeandcouldnotstoppraisingme.Itseemedlikeagoodopportunitytoshowmyselfoff,butIdidn'tmeanto.Infact,IwasashamedIhadthoughtaboutit.Itoccurredtomethathelpingotherswaspricelessandeveryoneshouldbealifeguard.版本二：Wehadtowait.Pattingtheirfacestowakethemup,wecontinuouslytoldthemtobestrong.Afterwhatseemedacentury,Ifeltextremelyexhaustedwhileswimminghardtokeepmyselfafloat.CastingalookatTom,Icouldtellhewasalsoapparentlyworn-out.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseofhorrorsurgingthroughmywholebody.Saltstinging（刺痛）myeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.ButIstillshoutedinmyhead:focus.Insheerdesperation（在绝望中），Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthemheadingtowardsusinthedistance.Thankyou,Lord.Quitesoon,Ifeltstrongarmspullmeoutoftheseaontotheboard,andthetwokidsweresenttothehospitalwithoutdelay.Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwokidswereingoodcondition.Sighinginrelief,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.Iknewtheywouldhavediediftheyhadbeenintheseaforanylonger.ObviouslyIhaddoneabigdealwhichissurelyagoodopportunitytoshowoff.Ihadexpectedtoexperiencesomesortofsenseofwellbeingorgreatness,butnoneofthatcame.Ratherthanfeellikeahero,Ibelieveanyonewhocouldswimwouldhavedonethesamething.Passage2落水被救“IfmumfindsoutthatPmgoingtothebeach,Pllbeinbigtrouble.1saidtomyselfsoftlyinalowvoice.Iwentdownstairsslowlyandtriedtowalkcasuallyintothekitchen.AsIwaswalkingtowardsthebackdoor,mumaskedwithoutlookingupfromher“dish-washing“，“Whereareyougoing?^^Iansweredbackwithouthesitation/Iamgoingtothegardentoplay."AfterIgotoutofthekitchen,Ibreathedasignofrelief.Myplanhadworkedoutfinesofar.Iclimbedthefenceandjumpedontothemuddyfieldnexttomyhouseandstartedrunningtowardsthebusstopattopspeed.AfterhalfanhourIwasatthebeachscanningthecrowdformyfriends,JimmyandBobby.Twoyoungmenwereracinginthecanoes（独木舟）.Afterawhile,Isawthemnearacoconuttree.Irantowardsthemandgotintomyswimmingtrunk（游泳裤）.Foraboutanhour,weplayedvolleyballhappily.Suddenly,Bobbyhittheballtoohardandtheballfellintothesea.JustasBobbywasgoingtopickuptheball,thetidecameinandcarriedtheballfurtherandfurtherawayfromtheshore.IwantedtoshowoffmyswimmingskillssoIdeclaredtohelpgettheballforthem.Idivedintothewaterandstartedswimmingatasteadypace.Afterswimmingforabouttenminutes,IbecametiredbutwhenIsawthattheballwasonlyafewfeetawayfromme,Iputinanextraburstofspeed.However,justasIwasgoingtogettheball,averystrongcurrentswepttheballfurtherawayfromme.Atthatmoment,astringofweed（海草）tangled（缠绕）upwithmyfeetandIcouldnotswimproperly.Istruggledtokeepafloatbutitwasnouse."IfIhadlistenedtomyparents,thiswouldneverhavehappened,,?Ithoughtsilently.Paragraph1Finally,afterstrugglingforaminuteortwo,Istillgotpulledunderwater.Paragraph2WhenIwokeup,Iwasinanemptyroomlyingonabed.参考范文:Paragraph1Finally,afterstrugglingforaminuteortwo,Istillgotpulledunderwater.场景一：Timepassingus,tirednessengulfed（包围了）mewithmyfeetstijf/numb（僵硬/麻木）andshivering./Watchingtheshoreinthedistance,Ifeltpowerless（无力的）asifIwasbrokentinyboatsatthemercyoftheterribleweed,（simile）Achillfeelingcreptupherspine./Tearsoffrustrationandhorrorgushingfrommyeyes,IfeltIhadsunkintohopelessness.场景一：“Ineedtothinkoutaway!^Imuttered（喃喃自语）.ItoldmyselfIshouldnevergiveup.ThenIpulledtheweedagainwithgreateffortsbutinvainagain.场景三：Insheerdesperation（在绝望中），Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthem.Asifclutchinqatstraws,Ishoutedatthetopoflung.Themensawmeandracedtowardsme.Bythetimetheyreachedme,Ihadbeenalreadyunconscious.Paragraph2WhenIwokeup,Iwasinanemptyroomlyingonabed.场景四：朋友ItwasnotuntiladoctorcameintotheroomthatIrealizedthatIwasinahospital.JimmyandBobbytoldmethetwoyoungmenbroughtmetotheshoreandsentmetothehospital.场景五：关于我Sighinginrelief,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.IknewIwouldhavediediftheyhadnotturnupforanylonger.场景六：父母Afterafewminutes,myparentswithhalfangryandhalfworriedfaceswalkedin.MyparentsscoldedmeforrunningoutofthehousesecretlybutwerealsogladthatIwasnotseriouslyinjured.场景七：点题：Iwillneverforgetthatterrifyingexperience.Neither